|Reviews for Vis Insita|
| InfiniteDragon chapter 23 . 10/21/2014
Not something I expected, given the last chapter, honestly.
Or anything, really. lol
I'm alright with time-travel (you know what I mean, whether it actually is or not) as a genre, so I'm not adverse to this at all, but I have to admit it's making me quite curious as to where you're going with it and what route you'll take to get there.
| Deadman19 chapter 23 . 10/21/2014
Wait...what? Good chapter but I'm confused as to how they got from hopping the wall to Hogsmeade to going back in time?
| Passionismywriting chapter 22 . 10/18/2014
Another interesting chapter. In this case, I feel like Dumbledore has given Scott a heavy task. On the one hand, he should tell Harry about being a horocrux, but on the other hand, I get why J.K. waited until the last moment. Either way Harry will be pissed. As a recon mission, this chapter was important to the story because finally they are once again on the offensive. As it stands once they get the cup, all that's left is confronting Voldermort. I can't wait to see how we get there.
| Passionismywriting chapter 21 . 10/18/2014
Ok, I'm sorta confused here. Dumbledore got interrupted by hermoine before he could finish telling Scott, Harry couldn't be killed by Voldermort. But was Scott able to come to that conclusion with what Dumbledore WAS able to tell him? In this I'm confounded by my advance knowledge of J.K. Canon. I know Harry won't die, so I finished Dumbledore's sentence in my head. But did Scott? As always you are writing a really well thought out fanfiction.
| LilyArcher chapter 22 . 10/14/2014
Awesome as usual. Every time you update this story, it makes my day. Actually. I kid you not.
I much prefer a novel length fanfiction to one-shots, but that's just me. I usually find that one-shots are unsatisfying and leave me wanting more, but no more is coming. The same thing about unfinished fanfiction. I usually avoid those, but yours is an exception. I started That Terrifying Momentum when it was completed, so I thought I would have a good, satisfying ending. Little did I know, there's a sequel. I like this story too much to just abandon it though, so every month, I come back and check to see if there's a new chapter.
| Wren Truesong chapter 22 . 10/14/2014
My my. My goodness gracious my oh.
This was NOT what I was expecting last night when I rather boredly clicked on the only title in my PhoenixSong update email, which I only still have because I never bothered to turn it off because it's an email I don't much use anymore.
I was just out for something different. I certainly got it, and I ENJOYED the experience! XD
Scott and Lilah and Sophie all surprised and delighted me, and you really have a beautiful handle on our Six. You do marvellously with Ginny in particular given how little we have to go on, and I must admit I fell into giggles when you mentioned the Bechdel test.
And your Girl Talk with Hermione was GREAT. XD
I'm going to have to keep an eye on this one. Thanks for sharing!
| Lessa-W chapter 22 . 10/11/2014
Have loved you story so far , you are doing an awesome job developing the characters and their relationships in a why that pulls a reader in . Love how long the chapters are too!
| Inoeth chapter 22 . 10/4/2014
This chapter felt a lot closer to the original chapter than others, but with your own twists and changes that ultimately enhance the original story and plot.
I am very curious to see more changes to the HP characters in terms of their thoughts and actions, along with more and larger changes to the full story as all the little changes that have occurred ripple out to change far more.
Given that you are keeping many aspects of the original story such as the horocrux hunt and where they are located, some things do have to be effectively just a re-write with a few changes and enhancements, such as this chapter, but I do sort of feel that there should be more changes and that by this point in the story, the story should be looking far less like the original novels than it currently does.
Although you're doing an admirable job in continuing this story and trying to do more original things than most, I find that my biggest fault with fanfiction stories is the fact that so many people change something in the original and then fail to truly appreciate how those changes can completely change the entire story from there on out.
I'm rather curious as to when and how this story will end, and how close to the original novels it ends up being.
In any case, keep it up and thanks for being one of the very few authors with long unfinished stories to actually continue to update and get closer and closer to finishing.
| Yami Umi chapter 22 . 9/30/2014
I got really surprised when i got to the page and suddenly found two chapters of Vis Insita updated. For some reason, the first update must have eluded me, though I have no idea how exactly that happened (I usually check at least once every day, two days top).
And past tense rules. For me, narrative is more natural like that, though I don't know if it's some small and very slight reasoning my inconscious have predeterminated, or if I just got used to it and prefer it that way now. Most of the good books I have read, as long as they're a narrative, of course, were written at past tense, so... (I'm looking at you, Joanne K. R.).
By the way, two things: I much prefer long one-shots than small and curt ones. An Eight thousand words story sounds about right for me, every now anx then.
And, for last, don't know if You're into the genre or not, but Cuckoo's Calling is a little good book, and I recommend it to anyone who is afan of Rowling's work. I enjoy the main character way too much, and for some reason, I think you'll also enjoy the company of Cormoran Strike. There is a second book already, if you like the series (shr plans to make at least seven). Can't wait for the third, to be honest...
And finally, good chapter, though with your next update I'll bring something that came to mind about your story. I'd like to see your thoughts on it. Til then, see ya!
| Nifty Niffler chapter 22 . 9/30/2014
Nice chapter. Looking forward to seeing what happens when they get back to get rid of the horcrux.
| Opaque-Cavalier chapter 22 . 9/29/2014
Another horcrux captured and a Cannibalistic Humanoid Underground Dweller reference! Well done Sir. Of course, I was kind of hoping for running gun battle (with suppressors of course)...
| sylvelle chapter 22 . 9/29/2014
It was great, found myself telling them "room of Hidden things" I don't think they heard but you did. Good chapter
| IHateSnakes chapter 22 . 9/29/2014
Excellent, as always, and the perfect anodyne for a crappy day at work. One possible mistake in your first sentence: Harry probably had a lot of interaction with Prof Binns, the History of Magic teacher. Or maybe he slept through the classes like Ron. Can't wait for the next installment! ihs
| InfiniteDragon chapter 22 . 9/29/2014
For what it's worth, you are NOT the only one who's noticed that, and despaired. lol
Honestly, I think all your points are at least partially responsible. Plus, at least in some cases, the general lack of education. Not that most educators (at least the ones I know) don't TRY, but you have to be willing to pay attention in English class, or to pay attention to what you're reading and how it's written, for that to work.
But yes, that is standard- third- (or first) person past-tense. Anything else is a severe enough jar that a single sentence in present-tense can draw me right out of a story, and in some cases has been enough to turn me off of an otherwise well-written story forever.
So again, not just you.
As far as Vis Insita goes: I like how you played the use of a Muggle Repelling (or X Repelling) Charm into the story, and showed only the effects without explaining it, leaving it for the readers to figure out (and eventually Harry). :)
I'm also looking forward to seeing the other Kharadjai's reactions to the diadem, especially when it's awake and defensive. :)
| Lone Wolfe 82 chapter 20 . 9/5/2014
Thank you for writing a story that has consumed my entire week. I find it brilliant, and so unlike anything else that I've read. I'm almost disappointed that I'm all caught up, because now I have to wait to find out what happens next. (Reminding me, yet again, why I try to avoid WIPs... lack of patience!)
As for the question of interactions with Muggle locations, I don't mind it, but I also feel that it has the potential to get repetitive, since the Primes are all more or less clueless about Muggle stuff. Then again, nothing you've written here has been boring or repetitive, so I doubt this would, either.
(Also, as an aside, I think I prefer Scott as an adult as well.) Either way, wherever you take this tale, just keep writing it!