Reviews for Life at the Dursleys
Harrietta chapter 8 . 4/11/2014
Poor Harry always getting locked up!
Harrietta chapter 4 . 4/11/2014
This is really neat! Great job!
Guest chapter 1 . 6/14/2013
wtf is kindergarten?
Cassandra30 chapter 5 . 10/3/2010
Oh no! I don't think the police would have let Harry go that easily.
Cassandra30 chapter 4 . 10/3/2010
This is good! Are the police going to listen to Harry? Are they going to actually look at Harry?
Cassandra30 chapter 3 . 10/3/2010
Good for Harry!
Cassandra30 chapter 2 . 10/3/2010
Good chapter. Much too short though.
Cassandra30 chapter 1 . 10/3/2010
Really good start!
CNJ chapter 8 . 8/30/2003
Neat! Touching and poignant too. Harry had such a dismal life with the Durlseys and I really hope he gets away from them for good soon. Funny how you have him accidently wind up at the Malfoys! Well written; keep up your good work!
Crystal chapter 8 . 3/16/2003
Names Pettigrew, Peter Pettigrew.”

( A/N- “ My names Bond, James Bond.”)


Anywho it's preety good a little too rushed really.
Arifel chapter 6 . 3/13/2003
Okay, I don't want you to get angry at me for being to harch or critical. I just want ed to point out a few things that would help you writing techiniques. First of all, you need to gather a plot and then add to it, kind of like feeding a fire. Second, you need to be more dscriptive. Tell about what the scenery looks like and and tell more about, maybe for example, what the characters personalities were like. Ex: "I don't know." Harry replied with a sadistic grin on his face. This is going to be a long one. You need to work on your sentence structuring and grammatical skills. You need to use commas a little more often. You also tend to jump araound a bit. It seems kind of bland, like there's no excitement. Use exclamation points when you DO want to show excitement. I mean Harry is the boy-who-lived, wouldn't people be more excited to see him, in person? 'I hope that didn't ssound too harsh. I don't want you to think I'm trying to sound mean or anything.' Um, well, I think that is it for now.

Little Sakura chapter 8 . 8/14/2002
Patricia you took my advice?

I cant believe it! Is my advice good

or something? Okay keep up the good work!

I still cant believe u took my advice!

-little sakura
Me chapter 8 . 8/7/2002

I'm sorry but that was rather anti-clamatic

I liked the story until the end though...
Little Sakura2 chapter 7 . 8/6/2002
You can make Dumbledore apparate in the dungeon and rescue Harry and why is harry only in kindergarten maybe u should make it at least 10 years old Harry Potter. Dont rushed all the excitements and the events its going a lil' too fast but the rest is okay. Keep it up _

Tell me if u have the other chapter up okay?

- Little Sakura
Little Sakura2 chapter 1 . 8/6/2002
I'll kick Dudley gang's butt if i were Harry!

well nice start! gotta read the next chapter!
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