|Reviews for Humanity|
| 2313021 chapter 4 . 10/8/2011
Another good chapter.
I would suggest, however, that you have the number of chapters in order to make them longer. Right now, they feel to me a touch too short, with only one event per chapter, which makes for a bumpy pacing.
| 2313021 chapter 2 . 10/3/2011
I quite like this beginning, and I hope to see more. Is this Grayson related to the arms dealer from HR or just a coincidence?
| Tsorfie68 chapter 1 . 9/7/2011
This might turn out to become something very interesting ! I'll keep an eye on it... In my opinion there are no glaring flaws in your writing. Even better, this exposition scene is well-paced, and not at all boring.
I don't think I can criticize or fairly judge any work that is above average on this website, since English isn't my native language (my vocabulary range isn't exactly all that wide, and I enjoy simple reads) but I'm favoring it anyway.
Sarif's ending, huh ?...