|Reviews for Black Cross Acadamy|
| iloveonepiece chapter 1 . 11/13
Lavi is 18 years old
| dragonlver chapter 9 . 4/15
I know you gave your story up for adoption but I can't find it with the new author. Skybrezz everdeen right? Cause fanfiction says this author doesn't exist please help. I really want to read more of this story but I can't find it. Oh and even though you're not writing it anymore I'm still gonna say I love the way you've been doing things. And the twist where Cross is the defense against the dark arts teacher, brilliant. And the love triangle between Allen, Kanda, and Lavi is terrific. And I hope Lavi doesn't give up. So even though I'm probably one of the last reviews you'll get for this story. Thank you and I do hope you attempt to write another story sometime in the future. I'll defiantly read it. And I don't know what's been happening in your home life recently. I hope it's better then it was. I r sincerely hope you and your parents get throught he tough time together, and if your parents have already separated. I'm sorry. It must be hard on you. Best of luck and if theirs anything I can offer be it just support in loving D grey man and other mangas or animes.
| Nickirem.Tetsuya.Zoldyck chapter 8 . 6/13/2013
Hmmm... Is this a threesome? I hope so...
| Nickirem.Tetsuya.Zoldyck chapter 2 . 4/29/2013
Rushed-ish, but its really good.
| Rewiev-Sloth chapter 8 . 3/24/2013
Hey so I noticed that your haven't updated in a while and figured, maybe some useful pointers will help. First I would like to say that I like your idea. Fem!anyone is automatically kick-ass. Brownie points for cross over. It's what attracted me to your story.
I noticed that you pointed out that the characters were ooc, and that you weren't the best speller.
That's okay, first step is realizing it. The easiest thing to address is your spelling errors, it seems to be the same problems over and over again. Mostly just stick your story into a program for spell check. I noticed quiet a few of your errors stemmed from two things. First is the simple problem of two words that look really similar. Like "weather" and "whether", and all the words that need apostrophes.
Second is that it seems like you forget the grammar rules of names. Take your time and go through, capitalize all of them. Make sure you spell them right. No matter how much longer of an update, it will be much more appreciated if the proper research and application is done. Wikipedia the shit out of everything. Especially for stories that involve a different language coming into play. -man is a manga, is stems from japan and hence it must be translated. Things like unique names and attacks can be spelled weird. Harry Potter while originally hailing from English, is still unique in the whole spelling of spells, and names. Your biggest repeating offence appears to be Hermione's name.
I don't want to overwhelm you with to much info so I'll briefly go through the oocness. If you wanna talk more about it, I'm totally open. While you seem to get the basic jist of the characters. Kanda's a McGrumpy Pants, the Golden Trio can be open and nice to people and totally distrusting right off the bat, ect.. Yet that appears where it stops. Try for a deeper character analysis. Stop for a moment and really think about if you were in their shoes, with their history. What would you do? If you suddenly realize an ally who is suppose to be a man looks really cute how would their reactions vary. Kanda's grumpy, so make him annoyed. Lavi's relaxed so maybe he's less annoyed and more amused, expand on this thought process. It can really help to bring your writing to the next level. Mind you I don't want to control your story. If you think they will react totally opposite from mentioned examples then do it that way.
I hope I didn't bum you out. I am going to be totally honest with you, a lot of improvement is needed. That improvement will come with time though. I'm giving you this super long review because there are things about your story that really shine through. Besides what I first mentioned in the beginning of the review, I also noticed your sentence structure. It's really good. Your dialogues are well written. You seem to have a natural gift of setting them up properly, and making it flow. I must admit I am jealous of it. When I was at your level of spelling, sentence structure was the farthest thing on my mind and it sucked because of that.
I'm pretty sure I got out what I wanted to say but if you wanna talk more then feel free to message me.
| ravecrazeglitch chapter 8 . 1/18/2013
AHHHHHHH! i love it
| xxxThe Musician's Angelxxx chapter 8 . 9/18/2012
please continue it's really good
| Mystic Myra 8 chapter 8 . 8/21/2012
hope u contiue it
i'd love to read the rest
| RoxyStar05 chapter 8 . 7/29/2012
Holy Quack! Please, please, please write more! PLEASE UPDATE THIS AS SOON AS POSSIBLE! :D
| Happycafegirl chapter 7 . 6/28/2012
oh no... no no no no no no! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! poor Allen when will she be away from her master i feel so bad that the new teacher is her master
| 99DenmonChick99 chapter 8 . 6/22/2012
I like this story very much XD but if I could make a suggestion...you might want to consider finding a beta for this story because you grammar and punctuation is kinda bad...although not as bad as others lol but great job on the story so far and I'm looking forward to reading more :)
| Butter is Found chapter 8 . 6/20/2012
I see... a lot of spelling and grammar errors... But that doesn't really matter as long as we're able to read it. If you want any tips of any grammars, ask me. Also, you should read the whole chapter and correct it again.
| Neithia chapter 7 . 6/19/2012
Keep on going, ya know you want to. Yes, yes! The DRAMA! Why has it stopped? It must continue!
- Rantings of a crazy girl
| allen chapter 7 . 6/15/2012
next chapter next chapter next chapter and herminone so needs to catch on
| alice chapter 7 . 6/11/2012
next chapter next chapter