The story is good but lacks a main plot. It seems all over the place after awhile and gets confusing fast. The whole plot with Jimmy and then suddenly back to Alpha can leave readers lost. Next time stick with one topic and try not to drag the story so much I give it a 6/10

For some reason, i have the feeling that the girl that confronted Ash in Kalos, was Bonnie and her deceased brother is Clemont, because its a little hard to think that this girl simply run in Ash for pure coincidence, its more likely that Ash and this girl crossed paths during his journey in the Kalos League when Ash was challenging the Gyms in this circuit of the Pokemon league, that leads Ash eventually to the Lumious city Gym.

And regarding the tragedy that Ash caused them, perhaps years ago, when he was still Alpha, Ash traveled to the Kalos region by a mission of Team Rocket to get native pokemon of this territory, and this leads him to stole the Clemont's Shinx, who was a old friend of Clemont, making that this theft leaves the poor Clemont distraugh and devastated, especially as unlike the Original timeline in that Clemont and Shinx simply ended separated for some events, in this story Clemont outright lost his friend Shinx when Alpha took him away and possibly sold him in the Black Market for the Team Rocket, destroying any shred of hope for Clemont to see Shinx again.

Also, perhaps this incident caused a series of tragic events, all this caused by the spiral of depression that Clemont was suffering after lost Shinx. Starting possibly by the fact that Clemont was losing his inspiration, concentration and interest in the invents and machines, that eventually leads him to be discharged from the academy in that he was studying, getting worse his depression and self-esteem. Also, this depression leads him to failed in creates Clem-bot to helps him in the Gym, forcing him to stay longer in Lumious city Gym. Adding that as result of his sadness, Clemont lacked the capability or interest in be a proper Gym leader, leading to that his Gym ended in serious problems with the Pokemon League, whom ended passing the title of Gym leader to his father Meyer, while Clemont was banned from be a Gym leader, forever, leading Clemont to reach the breaking point of his depression, that eventually droves him to commits suicide when he can't take it anymore, all this caused because Alpha cruelly took away his friend Shinx.

And regarding the Lumious Gym, Meyer become the new Gym leader, but as result of the tragic death of Clemont, Meyer become bitter by the grief, that he become reclusive and isolated, adding to lose his happy smile, even to the point of be only focused in run the Gym in honor to Clemont. But sadly, this fact also caused that Meyer can't has time with his daughter Bonnie, leaving the poor girl sad not only for lose her brother, but also by the fact that her father hasn't time for her, leaving Bonnie practically alone in her grief. Leading to that Bonnie developed a notable grudge in Ash for this, for considered as the man that destroyed her family.

And finally regarding to the confrontation itself, perhaps after that Ash managed to won some Gyms in the Kalos circuit, he and May returned to Lumious city for the next Gym. Then, May chooses to go shopping in the stores of Lumious, while Ash was going to the Gym to challenges it. But just when Ash was about to enter in the building, Bonnie stormed out and stopped him from enter, and demands him to be gone, leaving Ash shocked by this sudden hostility, but then after retrieves his focus, Ash refuses it as he want to challenges the Gym, then Bonnie challenges Ash to a Pokemon battle in that if she wins, Ash should leaves this place and never return. But of course, Ash defeats Bonnie easily, but then the young girl start to cry, and she finally reveals her reasons to be angry with him, as she explains Ash about when he stole Clemont's Shinx, that leads her brother to a spiral of depression that cost him his life, adding that this tragic lose leads to her father become reclusive and only focused in run the Gym, leaving Bonnie alone with her pain, all this because Ash, making that she declares that he doesn't deserve to get the badge of the Gym of her family, after destroyed this once happy family, and she'll never forgives him for this. Then Bonnie finally run away from Ash while she is still crying, leaving Ash notably sad and affected by this revelation, to the point that he think do not deserve get the chance of become Champion of Kalos after caused so much grief to innocent people, leading Ash to abruptly leaves Kalos and return to Kanto, to meditates about his past crimes, and later, he call May and his other friends to explains about his sudden decision to cancels his journey for Kalos, leading to the events of this Epilogue.

I never thought i’d get a notification about you updating again, but i’m so happy! The epilogue was great, and made me want to reread the story, hope life’s treating you well

It’s been years since I last read this story and it’s still the best Ash-betrayed fiction in my opinion.

I don’t know if you’ve finished editing the chapters or not but when you have I will definitely give this another read.

Unrelated side note I only recently discovered that Gerbilftw deleted his account which is a massive shame. I think the two of you did darker Ash better than anybody.

Good novel but that kiss with dawn is not a good idea as per ash nature he is not a pervert who just kiss his friends but good idea and good execution

Also, as another suggestion about some other possible story, i was thinking in a Spin-off story of "The Betrayed Champion", specifically, about a What if one of the characters used the power of Celebi to time travels and prevented the fateful moment in that Ash was betrayed, specifically i am talking about May.

I mean, perhaps this Spin-off will takes place after the incident of Kalos, when Ash was confronted by one of his former victims and he leaves Kalos for this, leaving Paul and May alone. And maybe during the time in that Ash was meditating in his home, May was very sad and depressed by the situation of Ash, lamenting that all this started because the actions of Drew and his schemes that leads to ruined Ash's life, making that she wishes finds a way to makes that the things can be like before. And suddenly, she get a call from Kurt, the pokeball maker, and he tells her that he finally managed to unlocks the GS pokeball, and ask her to comes his place. (note: during the years in that Ash faked his death, May became acquantice from Kurt during some journey in Johto, making that she become interested in the GS pokeball, as this was the previous duty of Ash)

And once that she came to Kurt workshop, she finally opens this pokeball and release Celebi, whom will be notably grateful for be free again, and as result, Celebi want to rewards May for this, and as result of her previous concerns about Ash, May asks Celebi to sends her conscious to her past self, specifically the night in that Ash was betrayed 3 years ago, allowing May traveled in the time, at least her mind. And as result of this, May will be prepared to undo the plans of Drew, like that during some conversation with her friends during the night, May excuses her to go outside for some reason, and she will go to spies Paul, Ash and Drew, and takes notes of the actions of Drew to knocked out Paul with his Roserade, making that May can uses this event like that she was a key witness from the actions of Drew, and she convinces everybody to gives Ash the benefit of doubt, and interrogates rigorously Drew, to forces him to say the truth, allowing to May to clear the name of Ash, even before to that Ash finally return to the Pokemon center, making that this time, Ash only be confronted by his friends to tell him about the actions of Drew, leaving Ash simply disappointed from him, and Drew leaves the scene crying.

And as result of this outcome, Cynthia will apologize Ash for be thinking that he stole her pokemon, and they simply will be preparing for their match in the next day, allowing Ash to challenges Cynthia for her title, and perhaps he manages to defeats her, allowing him become the new Sinnoh Champion, and as result of his position, he could be invited to the Champion league, to get the chance to challenges the other Champions, including Leon, all this thanks to the intervention of May.

And the reason to think that this possible story should be a Spin-off than canon, is because to be honest, i doubt that Ash accepts to uses the powers of Celebi to return to the past and undo some events to tries retrieves his original life, as even if this was very tempting for Ash, he could think that makes this will be like to be escaping from his problems again, than faces them and deals with the consequences, making that Ash think that tries to do this could be like a coward action. Without count, that Ash also could considers that if he undo the past, he could forgot some important yet harsh life lessons that he learnt, particulary about all the consequences of his actions for worked with Team Rocket, the show more value for his friends, and even learns the truth about his brother Red, without count that if he undo the past, the Team Rocket will return again, making that Ash think that won't be a good idea to travels to the past, and he will think in simply still lives the path that he created as result of his own actions, and accepts his life, than tries to be changing it.

Sorry by sent a lot ideas for other possible stories, but after read "The Betrayed Champion", i was thinking that could be interesting to see other stories related with this fic, like a Sequel, and/or a Spin-off.

If you are considering write a sequel of "The Betrayed Champion", i was thinking in an interesting idea, what if the main antagonist of this sequel is the Hunter J.

I says this, because if you analyzes it in retrospective, Hunter J was actually the indirect responsible from the events of "The Betrayed Champion", as she was whom killed Delia, and framed Red as the murderer, leading that he ended like a fugitive, and that Ash ended harboring a misplaced grudge in his older brother. And as result of this, Red ended becoming a mercenary, as to be a criminal, he couldn't has a normal life anymore, bringing as result that Drew could hired him to his plan of frame Ash from sabotaged Cynthia before their match, leading that his own friends turned their back to him, and pushed Ash to the life as Team Rocket member, leading Ash to become Alpha, and ended staining his reputation with his criminal record, leading to the current events of this epilogue, in that Ash will be tormented the rest of his life by his crimes, and be critized by his victims for ruined their lives, causing that Ash even ended considering become a Pokemon Ranger, than be still a Pokemon Trainer.

And if Ash become a Ranger, this could certainly leads him to faces notables criminals, among them, the Hunter J, whom maybe could reappears alive after the events of the battle in the Lake Valor, when her airship was sunk into the lake, and she was apparently killed in action. But perhaps she managed to escaped alive, and now she could plans a revenge in Ash for ruined her previous businness. Adding that Ash could also set score in the person resposnible for brought misery and grief to his family during years. And even, to considers that Hunter J also steals pokemon from trainers, the fact that Ash defeats her and stops her, could be like a penance for his crimes, as now he will be defending the people and pokemon from criminals like J, or Alpha, allowing Ash to uses his new career to makes a service to the society and makes proper ammends for his crimes, to restore eventually his public image, and help to overcome his past and inner demons with the time.

To be honest, i think that the current situation of Ash is ironic, in the sense that he was falsely accused by a crime that he didn't commited in the beginning of the story; stole Cynthia's pokemon out of sabotage. But now, he is truly culprit from far worse crimes; theft of pokemon, assasination and conspiration behalf the Team Rocket, during years.

And even if Ash was pardoned by the authorities, and his friends don't keep him accountable by feels themselves culprits from this situation, sadly, his current situation implies that his career as pokemon trainer will be stained by this controversy, about his crimes as Team Rocket member, to the point that Ash cancelled his journey to Kalos abruptly by be confronted for one of his victims, leaving clear that he will be never accepted in good terms by the public as champion or master pokemon.

Even, to considers this outcome, i guess that Ash will forget definitely the offer of Cynthia about a pokemon battle for her title, as Ash could think that as result of his criminal past, this battle could brings a very negative backlash behalf of public, for gives too much privilegy to a former criminal, to the point that if Ash wins this battle, this could even leads to an outrage and a riot, as many people could despises that someone like Ash could get the champion title so easy. Adding that maybe Ash could considers rejects this offer out of respect to Cynthia, as she could ends dragged in this negative backlash as well, for be pampering a former criminal, risking her own reputation in the process.

To be honest, this story proves that every decision that you takes in the life, good and bad, will always have some consequence.

Wild to see this updated, even more wild that I didn’t see the notification until now. Great epilogue!

wow i am surprised it got updated and seeing all the changes and the epilogue made this story a lot better so glad it finally was ended though i might have been remembering wrong but i didn't see the 4th wall breaking stuff ash in it now so if it was removed that does suck but it still was chanaged better for the better so good job with this story and 8/10 only issue was how ash was not punished for his actions but i get why you didn't chanage that because it have to be a rewrite of the story and i hope you do make a sequel

A great way to end this story!

Man! This was an awesome epilogue, this fanfic is probably one of the best Advanceshipping fanfics out there, and I would really really love a sequel to it, great to see you're back, you're really one of those guys who can fill the gap left after Gerbilftw deleted all his stories... Nevertheless, an absolute shocker to see this after so much time lol, it was crazy to update this after 8 yrs, but sometimes craziness is the best thing one comes accross lol, and this was one of those cases, Great job!

Good epilogue, is cool to see Ash taking account of his actions back to be affiliated with Team Rocket, because it was a little illogical, and even cynical, that Ash wasn't concerned nor remorsed for his crimes and cruel actions when he was working for Team Rocket.

I mean, maybe he was indifferent when he was overwhelmed by the Alpha persona, but now that Ash himself returned, he should takes in account all his crimes against innocent people and pokemon, making logical and even interesting to see Ash starting to faces his past actions.

Like in this epilgoue, in that during his journey in Kalos, he was confronted by a girl, that lost her brother, because he commited suicide as result of that Ash stole his pokemon, showing to him that his crimes had notable consequences for many people, and even if he had a happy ending, many of his victims didn't.

Seriously, to considers his crimes, i won't be surprised that Ash ended getting many enemies, making that now this implies some kind of butterfly effects for his journey, in the sense that many people could hates him for worked by Team Rocket, and even this could creates notable distrust toward him, making that now Ash has to faces this ordeal in his life, forever.

Yet, was also cute to see the interactions between Ash and May in this epilogue, as they could talks about their past mistakes, and the current outcomes as result of this. Adding that was interesting to see May encouraging Ash to become a Pokemon Ranger.

Well, maybe to considers his criminal past, could be a better idea that he considers become a Pokemon Ranger than a Pokemon Master, because to consider the incident in Kalos, this certainly implied that Ash will never be accepted in good terms like a Regional Champion, as many people could hates him for his crimes, to the point that even his criminal past could brings negative controversies for his career as Pokemon trainer, making that his previous dream as Pokemon Master, won't be factible anymore.

But on the other hand, Ash could be more accepted like a Pokemon Ranger, as even his skills could be useful for this job, adding that to work with this justice forces, Ash could regains more the trust of the people, than being a Pokemon trainer.

Well, i really liked this epilogue, keep up the good job :)

Honestly, I've forgotten what this story was even about... It's been awhile since I've read an advance shipping story, you don't see many around these days.

Do iiiiittt. Write a sequel!