|Reviews for Otokage|
| Rayne Arianna Maranochi chapter 1 . 7/1/2014
In the words of Tayuya " Fuck This Shit!" (Gets up and walks out of Konoha) "They'll rue the day they made an enemy out of me, mark my words Konoha today you made one enemy to many."
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/14/2014
| sarge234 chapter 1 . 1/19/2013
| Toaneo07 Ver2.0 chapter 1 . 12/13/2012
whoa...hey...you know...hi ,dude
youre had be says me you...what the word...
talk me later ,dude
| ASTARCRAFTPLAYER chapter 1 . 5/28/2012
hey nice story but can i take it as u said u will not be writting this one so can i take it and do it on my own
| OSR fanatic chapter 1 . 4/7/2012
Intesting Start. :) Though WHY HAVE YOU NOT UPDATED THIS STORY IN ALMOST 4 MOUNTHS? Other than that UPDATE AS SOON AS POSSIBLE!
| EndGame666 chapter 1 . 12/17/2011
Not a bad start. Can't say much more than that as this is standered fair for "banished naruto" fics, banishing sasuke as well though is an unexpected twist that I like. Needs work on grammer(as do the rest of your fics) mostly in the use of pronouns. Two such cases are:
1)Naruto could not see their face because of masks but it was obvious that as if people feel sorry for her(him)
2)the three old councils and the center was Tsunade had his(her) head down
| Inuyonas chapter 1 . 12/17/2011
| Gold Testament chapter 1 . 12/16/2011
If you aren't going to post chapter 2 within three months then you might as well delete this because unless you add more story you won't get anymore reviews. Basically this is a somewhat unpopular story because you haven't updated yet, and it doesn't take a genius to realize it. Honestly if nothings been stopping you you probably could've made atleast 2 or 3 chapters maybe more
| dark the emo queen chapter 1 . 11/19/2011
Amazing simply amazing!
| XKhaosXKyuubiX chapter 1 . 10/27/2011
This is a promising beginning to a good fic. My advice... Don't fuck it up. I'm serious, I have seen authors write a REALLY good beginning and then their fics just start to go nowhere fast.
But so far this looks good. please update soon.
| Culebra del Sol chapter 1 . 10/20/2011
I like this story. It has a lot of promise, and a a pairing between Naruto, Hinata and Tayuya is a bonus.
Though, A problem is that you're...vague, when it comes to who's speaking in your story. I'd like it to be a bit clearer.
| Toto Yoshio chapter 1 . 10/9/2011
Interesting... I want to see more
| hooked reader chapter 1 . 10/2/2011
update soon...and i think u should have him learn of his parents and that the whirlpools/swirls came from his clan and he could remove them from konoha...after a big timeskip maybe
| narutodragon chapter 1 . 9/23/2011
yo cant wait to read more