Reviews for Sense and Sensibility
Shadow Eclipse chapter 1 . 9/13/2011
love it so far

can't wait to see what's next
Alex Dark-serpent chapter 1 . 9/13/2011
This looks pretty good. It seems like it'll end up being a dark-Harry fic. If so, I would want to read it even more. Dumbledore's 'greater good' attitude annoys me so much!

Update soon,

Alex Dark-serpent
thrnbrooke chapter 1 . 9/13/2011
Soooooooo need more!
Lady Laran chapter 1 . 9/13/2011
Very interesting story. Let's see what happens next. I can't wait to see!

I suggest too that you try to alter how you phrase things, just to avoid repetition. You use proper names all the time when you could alter it a bit to avoid repeating the names. For example:

Albus nodded. "One is always stronger."

Lily frowned. "I don't believe in murder."

The headmaster shook his head. "There is a spell to use that can ensure we have a hero who can defeat Voldemort."

The red haired witch bit her lower lip.

See what I mean? It flows easier and isn't repetitive. Hope this helps.
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