|Reviews for Accidental|
| pegasus5406 chapter 8 . 2/18
What a wonderful story, I really enjoyed it...thanks hon...bigg huggs. Peggy
| Dreamer Mist chapter 8 . 12/8/2013
Awwww I love this. Good job.
| sexysiren1981 chapter 8 . 8/10/2013
Oh wow i really loved this urs...sorry typing on my phone so spelling sucks. Loved ur lemons and the biting thing was super sexy and delicous. Love ur Jasper and Bella. Cant wait to read more of ur stories...keep up the exellent work :) also really liked how u worked out the Edward and Alice thing without making them out to be crazed loons lol
| XmariskaX chapter 8 . 5/6/2013
| Guest chapter 8 . 3/10/2013
cute story. they didn't marry though so im guessing that they didn't have sex till after she was turned. Which means that edward slept with her knowing she was jaspers mate. Thats messed up. He stole what was jaspers. But besides that one thing i loved this
| GeezerWench chapter 8 . 3/4/2013
“Basically the family had all decided keeping this huge secret from Jasper and I wasn't as bad as tattling on Edward and Alice.”
Well, anyway ...
Too right. Alice saw a vision of the Cajun vamp (we can only hope she's a voodoo queen) that would be Edward's mate and she feared he'd screw it up.
I'd have to agree. LOL
good job! I really enjoyed this story. Thank you for sharing it.
You did a great job. The flow was good, I liked how you put things, how you worded them. I appreciate that you took time to check your spelling and all that stuff. Or, I should say, the technical aspects. In addition to enjoying the story, I enjoy the fact that it wasn't a struggle to read due to mistakes, poor spelling, bad grammar, and all that.
Er, perhaps I've not worded that well. Setting aside the fact that I enjoyed your story, it is a pleasure to read one that is well done technically.
Besides the technical nuts and bolts part, I really liked the story. I liked how you put together that Bella and Jasper were drawn together, yet fighting it because they were committed to others.
Alice's and Edward's scheming really pissed me off, which, I assume, was the point. And their schemes certainly fit in with their inherent selfishness. Liked how you used that.
The Cullens not fessing up to knowing Bella and Jasper were mates seemed so "true to canon." It seemed natural that they would worry more about tattling on Edward and Alice, rather than easing Jasper's and Bella's distress.
I liked the descriptions of the different ways in which Jasper and Edward hunted. How you compared them and noted the differences between them.
I also liked those little idiosyncrasies you gave Bella - how she didn't like to wear shoes, but she did like socks. How she didn't want to wear pants, how she didn't mind being dirty. Adds dimension to her.
She and Jasper trying to make amends with the Cullens seems "right" too, even though they both admit it will be difficult and may take a while.
Edward running away to Louisiana seems a perfectly "normal" thing for him to do, too.
Over all, good job!
| GeezerWench chapter 7 . 3/4/2013
Wow, that was pretty darn hot.
So cute that they were both nervous, and Jasper all of a sudden decided to "become as chatty as a school girl." I liked that.
The biting - have no problem with that at all. *smirk*
In the previous chapter, Edward confessed he used venom from everyone to change Bella because he was worried he wouldn't have enough. Interesting thought you had there - that Bella would be attracted to Jasper because his venom was in her. So, prior to her being changed he was a little attracted to her and the venom made him more so? Making her drawn to him?
I see, I see. Good idea you had there.
| GeezerWench chapter 6 . 3/4/2013
"You should try biting Alice."
Hell of an idea!
Bella was too forgiving. I think I'd have slugged him for doing that bullshit and being to chickenshit to man up.
And everybody knew but Bella and Jasper. Holy cow!
Don't mind me. Just fussing. Even in the Twilight Saga I thought Edward and Alice would make a better pair.
| GeezerWench chapter 5 . 3/4/2013
Alice, Alice, Alice!
Of course! If Alice knew, then Edward knew and weren't they selfish to keep Bella and Jasper apart!
Meandering thoughts... so Edward maybe thought he'd never find his own mate so he kept Bella to himself, lied to her, made disparaging remarks to her, made he feel like a shit when she attacked a human, just so he wouldn't have to be alone.
Sounds so human, really.
Same with Alice. If her visions come when someone makes a decision, how would she ever see her mate if she'd never decide to let Jasper go?
They both need their asses beat.
| GeezerWench chapter 4 . 3/4/2013
I try to take notes as I'm reading so I don't forget stuff I liked. Hence the disjointed sentences at times.
“Love bites” – I like how you did that.
“I've never had any foot fetishes either, as far as I know." - LOL
Hmmmm. Edward never wanted to bite her because she really wasn't his mate? Then he urged her to never let anyone bite her. I'm thinking he was afraid she'd get attached to whoever bit her.
Jasper seems a bit reluctant. Perhaps nervous.
Well now. Looks she she got a little attached to Jasper. (And who wouldn't?)
Oh Lord, that was hot. Who'd have thought Bella would end up with a foot fetish? LMAO Then a neck fetish, and a ... Jasper fetish? LOL
| GeezerWench chapter 2 . 3/4/2013
Wow. I'm flabbergasted that Edward said she should go eat some humans and "get over it."
And she went to Peter's and Charlotte's place. Sounds like she really likes it there.
Figured Jasper had to show up eventually.
That was hot. And they never even touched each other. How friggin' convenient would that be? LOL
| GeezerWench chapter 1 . 3/4/2013
Wow. Quite the interesting twist to Bella's and Jasper's gifts.
And what a gift! The ultimate zipless f*ck!
I can just picture Emmett's shiny butt hanging out for the world to see. And him not giving a sh*t about it. LOL
| Smut Mommy chapter 8 . 1/23/2013
just read this whole little story, and I loved it. It's nice to see a WELL WRITTEN Bella/Jasper story, and one that's different from the norm. Will be looking for more from you.
| Carouselseeker chapter 7 . 12/22/2012
Totally awesome scene!
| janjan2009 chapter 8 . 12/21/2012