Reviews for The Shrew War, Book V: The Red Tower
mcmlxxvii chapter 7 . 10/26/2015
I think Snoga will be "in for a rude awakening," as you would put it
Auua Ytjoml chapter 8 . 4/6/2015
I don't trust Hanchett anymore'n I trust Urthblood and I'm sure neither'd be to pleased t'be compared wi' the other.
Auua Ytjoml chapter 1 . 4/6/2015
I don't generally have errors to point out but here's one; even if you shrink the largest beasts slightly and stretch the smallest beasts slightly, the badgercub would only have been as big as a full grown mouse when he was still hardly older than a babe-in-arms. Is he really that young? Cause he seems at the older end of the dibbuns range
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 23 . 10/19/2012
Tratton is definitely a competent and smart rat. Instead of following the arrogant line of many rat leaders before him, he shows humility and levelheadedness with his dealings with the rat engineer and his rebellious Captain. It's refreshing to find this sudden shift in evil characters; depicting them as intelligent instead of just cunning and clever and self-reliant. If it weren't for his ambitions, I might go so far as to consider him a true military genius, and I don't think it entirely fair for some readers and reviewers to claim his contrary ratlord attitude to be entirely characteristic of a Gary-Sue. I certainly don't believe that, especially not after his crushing defeat at the paws of Urthblood. His reliance on the ferret inventor also brings his Gary-Sue appearance down a peg or three.

Lord Urthblood certainly has his work cut out for him, but his prophetic abilities makes him seem very Gary-Sue. Preventing readers from seeing a little bit more into his character is not helping matters at all. He could just as easily be a tyrant who believes in what he does as a savior to Mossflower and surrounding country from the Searat foes and others, though the former is less likely. Lord Urthblood, as I've said before, is a warlord who will one day reach the end of his usefulness. As a fellow writer, that's my mindset for his character and what he is meant to do. I'm sure that's probably not what you envisioned him as, so please note that even prophetic warmongering badgers need a little bit of humanization and characterization in order to prevent them from turning into what appears to be a Gary-Sue character.

And I will continue to the next Book in the morning...

SomeoneI'mSure chapter 22 . 10/19/2012
"Snoga made no move to hide his actions from Hanchett, yet the hare was still surprised when the taut rope in his grasp suddenly went slack and left him drifting aimlessly upon the currents. Fortunately for him, he'd only been a few body lengths out into the river when Fitkin severed the line, so Hanchett had little trouble pulling himself paw-over-paw along his end of the rope back to the north banks."

Where did Snoga come from? I think you accidentally wrote down the wrong shrew.
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 21 . 10/19/2012
Good for Metellus. It's good to have such contrasting characters as Urthblood and Metellus, especially since the later might very well become a Badger Lord himself one day. To begin with a destructive Warlord such as Urthblood, it's always best to end with a wise, patient, and serious healer. Urthblood made the wounds and Metellus will hopefully help heal the scared world.
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 19 . 10/19/2012
Somehow, when you first introduced me to Broggen and I got a feel for your style of storytelling, I knew he was going to die...

That mouse Jiriel should come along. They could use a female archer mouse!
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 17 . 10/18/2012
Seriously? Am I the only one wondering where those Weasels were?
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 16 . 10/18/2012
I'm speechless...
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 12 . 10/16/2012
It's getting good, but I've been wondering about what happened to all those weasels...
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 8 . 10/14/2012
Abbess Vanessa needs to learn to make a decision quickly and stick to it, regardless of what happens. Besides, Hanchett should have scouted ahead for them, if he was so worried for their safety, and reported back whatever he might find.
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 6 . 10/14/2012
How do you keep track of all these characters and events? Do you keep notes or do you just memorize it all?
SomeoneI'mSure chapter 2 . 10/13/2012
Metellus is so sweet! He understands more than he lets on and thank goodness he's there for Mona's sake.
ifeelmad chapter 23 . 1/27/2012
Finishing chapter twenty one - I heartily sympathize with Melletus' anger at Vanessa's supposed insensitivity - or rather her lack of memory and loss of maturity. And in any other situation I would have applauded his determination to learn about healing. Unfortunately, despite my love of your saga, Wing, his resolve to learn healing seems like an addition to a long list of Gary Stuish qualities he seems to have. Compared to the greatness of this story, it's really no big deal, but that's why I can't really be impressed with his heroisms, because they're kind of annoying, and I feel that the less I see of Melletus, the better. Mona I like, despite the slightly Mary Sueish beginning she had. She's an interesting character. But Melletus gets under my skin.
ifeelmad chapter 22 . 1/27/2012
Still reading chapter twenty one - up to here, I applauded Cyril's fierce defense of Broggen, who only harmed Aurelia because of Fryc getting him drunk against his will. But at this chapter, he's getting so he's like some sort of sergeant , not allowing anyone to say anything about Broggen that he doesn't like.
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