|Reviews for Fenix Rising|
| Poop man chapter 1 . 1/26/2012
I think you did a wonderful and touching job with your fan fic. and hope to read more. Keep at it you did great.
| Shadowbane509 chapter 1 . 9/22/2011
Loved it, please write more!
| indielokimin chapter 1 . 9/22/2011
Lots of good things. First, the plot is engaging and the way you introduced Fenix in the beginning is fresh. Second, the chapter is well balanced between conversations, battles, and musings. It's not just guns blaring and explosions galore. And third, it has tremendous room for development.
But I do see alot of problems in your writing (asides from spelling). There are unnecessary details and redundant usage of the passive tense. Aim for clear and concise writing. Don't use big words unless there is absolutely no other way to express yourself. And also, try to aim for smoother transition in between the scenes.
Congrats for posting your first fanfic. Keep 'em coming!