Very good...I normally never bother to read X-Men crossover. Yet here I am, addicted to your fanfic. Lot of actions and I really like how your ending. It left us to wonder how much they accomplished and technology advances so far.

Overall, it probably is one of my favourite fanfic.

You must be having loads of fun with this story! Nice work and keep it up!

Well, somewhere along the reading about obligatory Ginny again i almost puked.
Now i value my iPad too much, so i stop reading this...

Wow! This was a fantastic story and a really fun read. Thanks for sharing:)

*murderous rage* *growls* FUDGE...

This is a great story, for the most part. The concept is an imaginative and very creative way to combine two universes that beg to be united. Harry Potter and X-Men are a custom fit, and having Jean as Lily's twin is a near stroke of genius. I have read stories before that have attempted to introduce Muggle technology to the Wizarding world, but they always seemed too forced and ill-fitted to be convincing. This fic does the exact opposite. The combination is absolutely inspired. The image of our Harry 'playing' with his JJ2 never failed to bring a smile!

The writing is simply exceptional, there's no other way to put it. The author(s?) and Betas (if there are any), have done a tremendous job of putting this fic together. Mistakes and grammatical errors are kept to a minimum, the story structure and plot development flow together seamlessly and the character development is superb. Very well done!

I love the way Harry is presented here: his emotional set backs and achievements, along with the love and support given to him so unconditionally by the 'Xavier Family' is so well done and heart warming in places that it almost brought me to tears. Harry (or indeed any troubled child), could not help but grow and thrive in such an environment - Bravo!

Having said that, I highly doubt that I will be reading anything by this author for some time to come, if ever again.

First of all the 'author's notes' at the beginning and ending of the chapters are both lengthy and annoying. They are asinine, ridiculous in the extreme and juvenile. Believe me, I'd skip over them completely if I could, but I rely on a 'voice reader' program (since I have problems with my vision) which makes that impossible, so I am stuck with having to tolerate that crap in its entirety. Frankly, I just can't take any more of it.

The other reason, which is minor in comparison, it the incessant 'flag waving'. I get that the author loves their country. They're not the only ones, I'm sure most of us love our country and I know I do - but I don't need it shoved down my throat! For crying out loud, the USA is not the greatest country in the world and I resent having the opinion that it is, shoved in my face. I understand that, as a plot devise, the students had to seek asylum from another country. I can even understand them going to the States: they do have military, as well as political clout to be reckoned with. However, that does not make them better than everyone else. Case in point ...

"My lord, the students are in a foreign country. Sending an auror force in could be construed as an act of war. The United States has an auror force larger than ours by more than triple. HAD THEY GONE TO SOMEPLACE LIKE CANADA, WE COULD HAVE ACTED WITHOUT WORRY. BUT the United States is not some little country to trifle with."

I honestly find this offensive, not to mention derogatory and unnecessary. The entire sentence in caps could have been omitted entirely without detriment to the plot, and it wouldn't have bothered anyone. This is not the only example, but it's the most blatant one and I'm sure I'm not alone in taking offence. Just because other countries of the world do not share your 'go in with guns a-blazing; shoot first, ask questions later" attitude, it does not mean that they are not as powerful (some little country to trifle with)! Just some food for thought to the author: take off those blinders and look around you. "It takes all kinds to make a world." That applies to countries and ideals, not just people.

It's a shame really that this author is so opinionated because their writing is exemplary (I am using the plural here because I don't know if this author is male or female and plural is gender-neutral). They are original and articulate. They have marvellous ideas and they most assuredly know how to translate them creatively into a wonderfully written piece of fiction. Once this author grows up, their potential will be limitless. I expect I'll check back in a couple of years to see if so much promise will be fulfilled.

To the author, I say this: I have tried to be gentle and constructive in my criticism, so if I have come across as too harsh, please do not be discouraged. You have some room for improvement but you are capable of so much more. In the meantime, best of luck.

Belldandy

That was a good merge of the two worlds. It was an entertaining story and you tied up the plot points nicely in the end. Thanks for posting.

Great fanfiction !

Awesome chapter !

Awesome !

Run Harry,
go and live,
live as you want
without fear
without rules.
Be free !

As usual, an excellent story...lots of interesting ideas and great characters. I'm not a huge crossover fan, but when they are done well they are fun, and this one was done very well. And, again as usual, the writing was top-notch. Thanks for posting!

Great chapter !

Great first capter, very interesting!

Great story :)