|Reviews for Of My Life|
| WWWWAAAAZZZZUUUUPPPP chapter 8 . 5/10/2013
Awesome story! Hope you update soon. :)
| Guest chapter 8 . 4/13/2013
Next chapter come on man hurry up
| Nicola chapter 3 . 12/16/2012
I've just finished reading the trilogy and knew as soon as I finished it that there would be some awesome fanfiction to carry the amazing journey of Todd and Viola on. This story is really great, even so early on, and I can't wait to see where you'll take us next. Keep up the great writing :) xxx
| saltwater10 chapter 8 . 11/23/2012
Please update soon, this is amazing :)
| perceptionofmypenmanship chapter 8 . 10/31/2012
OMG! YOU CAN'T LEAVE US HANGING! this is sooo amazing.
| perceptionofmypenmanship chapter 2 . 10/31/2012
Yes! He's Alive!
| Halofreak117SP chapter 8 . 7/13/2012
I have no idea what the prezzie is. Is Todd gonna snog her or something. I hope so...
| GlieseHoneyman chapter 3 . 4/27/2012
really like the story so far. im even on a computer in school to read it !
| Kambia chapter 8 . 2/12/2012
This is really good. I finished Monsters of Men earlier today, and spent most of the afternoon sitting on the sofa thinking about it cuz it was just amazing! And I was trying to think of how their lives would continue, came on here and BAM! Found this and this is perfect and brilliant and Steph is such a bitch! Actually, she reminds me of someone I know, but that just makes it easier for me to hate her ;) Please update soon, I can't WAIT to find out what Todd's present is for Viola! (((Is it a house?))) Kambia x
| purebristles chapter 8 . 1/23/2012
Cliffhangers are evil - update soon!
| u r awesome chapter 8 . 12/29/2011
. this is going to get good!
Please please please update soon! I love it!
| Kitsune Sohma chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
Okay, on the whole, this isn't a bad story. Quite out of character, though. Todd just isn't that mean, and Viola is polite and respectful to people older than here. I don't recall Steph being in the prequel; even if she was, she would've died in the ship crash that killed Viola's parents. If she wasn't on the ship, I apologise as I must have missed her.
But still, I don't see how she's a bitch. She seemed more like a scared little kid following the person in charge. I remember doing that with my brothers when I was young.
And now, on to major complaint #1: Ben just does not talk in Noise alone. Yes, he spent quite a lot of time with the Spackle, recovering and all, but he still would have known how to use his mouth for words. I understand that his Noise would be different, but he does speak; Spackle Noise is only pictures, after all, and Ben thinks and speaks in English even if his Noise just shows pictures. Also, since when does Ben have a house...? I don't remember that at all.
Number 2: Todd misspells words and does not speak in paragraphs unless he's rambling. He doesn't substitute "yer" for "you"; he uses it for "your" and "you're". I also don't like how he's playing Mayor and how he just left Steph in the woods. The Todd I know would never do that because he's just too nice. However, I did like how you kept him pretty much in character other than that.
Number 3: Viola is just not a bitch. Yes, she's protective of Todd because she loves him, but she would NOT haul off and slap anyone for any reason unless she was really pissed. Her grammar and spelling are impeccable as well.
Like I said, an okay story; the first chapter was promising, but I just couldn't bring myself to like it too much. Maybe read the books through again, get an idea of how the different characters talk and how they develop, yeah? Also, dialogue doesn't need to be italicised as well as in quotation marks. Work on showing, not telling. We need more detail.
I wish you luck with your next chapters and hope you didn't take my criticism too harshly. If I didn't like it at all, I wouldn't have even touched it.
| SebastianSnark chapter 8 . 11/27/2011
oooh a cat-fight REAWR!
Even though Steph hasn't seemed to do anythgin to warrant Viola's anger wich if I remember is pretty hidden... [maybe Viola's a Virgo? Idk] perhaps if you'd shown us Steph getting all cuddly with Todd I'd have believed this scene better.
What are these hints you are talking about? I don't seem to see them. Maybe they weren't obvious enough?
and over all 5/10
The plot isn't very clear the characters are a tad bland and your writing is a little awkward. But hey, it's for fun right? So as long as you are having fun writing I say go for it! I've only been giving criticism, I tried to make it constructive[ albeit, a tad harsh] you may choose to go by that or not. Best of luck with your next chapters!
| SebastianSnark chapter 7 . 11/27/2011
I agree with you, this isn't a bad chapter. It's actually my favourite chapter, in that viola is in-character. Aside from the occasional "ain't" also a few other things I've complained about [quotes, time card, etc.] very nice.
| SebastianSnark chapter 6 . 11/27/2011
Seriously what was keeping them apart before? I mean.. really? Also didn't Todd want to get away and start a new life with Viola in a different part of new world?
I still dont' get how Steph is a bitch.
show don't tell yadda yadda.