|Reviews for The Kingdom Comes Again|
| SirRealism chapter 4 . 7/2/2012
I'm enjoying your story, but your spelling and grammar errors make it hard to read. For example, you've been randomly capitalizing letters on words that are neither proper nouns nor the first words of a sentence. Also, you haven't been using apostrophes in contractions or when adding 's' to a name to indicate posession.
On another note, wouldn't the Chestnut-Fist training allow Ranma to punch flaming things without being burned?
| Ranmaleopard chapter 13 . 12/10/2011
cool! i cant wait to see more! Please continue to keep up the good work!
| Ranmaleopard chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
This is really amazing I can't wait to see what happens next. Please continue!
| god of all chapter 16 . 2/10/2011
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
| princess moonie of the moon chapter 16 . 5/20/2010
omg love this story please update soon _
can you please make it a ranma x usagi fic :P
| sparky555 chapter 16 . 3/30/2010
Not Bad! Ties Ranma into the Sailors without turning him into one, which is a big plus in my book! Even makes the senshi look not to bad, while not makeing the NWC seem over powered, which could be dificult. Hope to see more of this one day!
| Airier chapter 16 . 1/7/2010
I just read though the story, and I think it is safe to say that I loved every second of it. The villain is scary, with out ever seemingly falling into a cheesy stereotype. The fight scene are fast paced and interesting, and the characters all seem to be, well, in character
Honestly, this is a very enjoyable read. And, the best part is that I fully believe that someday this story will be finished (I doubt it will be any time soon, but that just means I have something more to look forward to).
Good luck with the story.
| SilentHypoCrit chapter 16 . 12/16/2009
Don't know the update history of this story, but starting in 2002 and still updating in 2009 is great! (more authors should do that)
Otherwise: nice story!
I especially like your idea for creating a new enemy to fight. Most creative I have read in a while. Fighting Serenity's grand dad is surely unique.
Good luck with further ideas.
| Queensarrow chapter 16 . 11/1/2009
Genma - Cat-fist
He's the comedic exaggeration of tough love.
He didn't keep tossing Ranma into the pit of starving
cats to teach him the cat-fist after the first time,
he kept tossing Ranma in to cure him of his fear of
cats. This is directly stated in the anime. There is a
therapy called desensitization where phobia suffers are
gradually exposed to what they fear, in a controlled
manner, over a period of time. Of course, this is Genma,
he want(ed) Ranma cured NOW. You've a head start, kinda,
with Artemis, take advantage of it. Especially with
Luna's help. Curing Ranma of his phobia while letting
him keep the nekoken would be awesome.
Akane - training
I came across a theory(?) where Akane is a certified
martial artist by her father, it's implied to be
nepotism, but my own thought is that she had learned
all the non-perverted techniques of the Tendo school.
Soun WAS trained by Happosai after all. Where the
Saotome school inherited the cheating and stealing side
the Tendos got the perversion, possibly the stronger
side. Soun may train Akane in the perverted techniques
after she marries (since Soun got three daughter out of them
and really wants heirs for the school), certainly not before.
Bashing - lack of
I like the fact that you aren't really bashing any
character. (aside from Genma but the Artemis flashback
Mamoru isn't being shown up by Kuno is great. This is
because Kuno is a great kendoist but not the great martial
artist because he only focuses on kendo. All the other
Neriman artists acknowledge the fact that they are often
challenged outside normal tournament rules. Kodachi takes
this to an extreme.
Mamoru should get some training, if only to arrive on time.
Akane not being bashed makes this crossover worth reading
for that alone. Especially since it's a Sailor Moon cross.
You haven't really mentioned this. Keep not doing so.
It seems to be a hot button. My own thought is Crystal
Tokyo isn't bad or evil. The cleansing thing isn't a
cultish brainwashing thing. It's more of sweeping aside
negative energy that results in comparatively peaceful
individuals for short time before the negative energy
seeps back in. Do this enough to the entire world and
some peace will stick as people will learn that negative
energy is bad. Of course some people like the negative
energy and this is where the black moon family comes from.
*At the time Ranma was in a state of extreme fear and this
will often distort memories.
| Digital Dragon Productions chapter 16 . 9/10/2009
Very Nice Story. I hope to see more.
| Guardoflight chapter 16 . 6/20/2009
Ok then, an interesting peice of work with clever character idea, but unless your picky you can't find many faults with this story (such as the Japanese SWAT is SAT 'Special Assualt Team)
| Jerrac chapter 16 . 5/19/2009
Good story! :D I'm glad you are focussing on the action and not much at all on romance. :D
There were a few minor grammar and spelling errors. "their" instead of "they're", misspelling technique names, etc. Do you read through the chapters before you post them to check for errors? If you do, you could try to find another person to do it as well. If you want to put that much effort in.
Also, I would suggest you go back in the earlier chapters and remove your in story authors notes. Not only are they highly annoying to readers, but I believe has rules against them.
| Bobboky chapter 16 . 4/1/2009
| Stoned Koala chapter 16 . 3/25/2009
“Oh, and find me a man, preferably a pit fighter or someone else physically tough but stupid as a brick.”
So what does he want with Genma?
| Jon chapter 16 . 3/25/2009
Who is pairing with ranma.