Finished reading the chapter.

What a lying, conniving bitch Hermione is. Her actions are a 100 times worse than Dumbledore's due to her relationship with Harry.

Snape is a thirsty desperate doormat of a simp for simply going along with her ridiculous notion of lying to the boys for a whole ass month.

Poor Ron. I used to dislike him but now he's my favorite character.

Both boys deserve better than the horny fuckers.

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Hermione and Severus are complete manipulative bastards here.

For all the slandering of Dumbledore, they're acting just as bad, if not worse than him.

Ron was 100% in the right for calling them out.

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Loved how Ron is the best cook out of all of them. Also poor baby Regulus /3

Umm why does Hermione keeping thinking about and comparing her current feelings to the ones she had for Lockhart? I'd understand comparing to Victor, but Lockhart? That was a silly preteen crush from a twelve year old that she most certainly would have outgrown by now almost five years later...

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Liked the take on Lucius's character.

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Umm badass Snape much?

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Lol loved the bit at the end.

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Tongue down her throat during the first kiss. Well someone's impatient. It was good in the beginning but kinda cringe as she said his name a bit after.

Really liked the description of Fiendfyre and the emotions affecting it.

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I swear if it was the bltch Bellatrix or that piece of shite Pettigrew...

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This Dumbledore is a dlck.

I rather liked Harry's reaction.

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Okay so as funny as the scene with Snape and Dumbledore, I can't say I'm a fan of this particular take on their relationship.

I could definitely going to more detail about this but I'm feeling kinda lazy now soooooo...

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Good job exploring Snape's thoughts. Your analysis of his initial motivations for joining Voldemort is excellent.

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Can't believe I forgot to point out that Harry's arrogance is spot on

I guess you're good at character analysis but not at writing relationships lol

(Sorry this is not intended to be mean at all, just a casual observation)

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I didn't think I was religious but the antiBiblical bits of this chapter had me up in arms...

Ignoring the blasphemous bits at the end (lol), the first part of the chapter with the duel was amazing! I absolutely loved Ron and Harry's reactions to finding out that Snape created that spell.

First half of this chapter was one of the best scenes in this fic so far.

I know I should end on a positive note but the convo in the second half between Hermione and Severus seems waaaaaaaaaaay too unnatural.

Me no likey. Ofc it doesn't matter what I like or dislike but still ;)

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Umm midlife crisis much? Sad old man trying trying to "fix" himself because of some creepo fascination with a girl half his age?

I have no problem at all w/ age gaps btw, in fact I prefer them to the standard of same age in relationships. The only problem here is that the portrayal of their relationship is extremely icky.

Coming from someone whose all time favorite HP ship is Tomione with Lumione following a bit after, I don't think I can get behind the Snapemione ship. God even the ship name sounds gross.

Snape is one of my favorite male characters while Hermione IS my favorite female character (besides Luna who is best girl btw), but I just can't see the two together in this fic.

Maybe in another story they'd work, but just not this one..

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Umm so this whole thing with Hermione liking Snape came out of nowhere. She definitely wasn't trying to "get him to see her as an adult" at the Christmas party. What the hell is this retconning..

Also I'm 100% with you Harry. I definitely want to throw up now..

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