An interesting beginning. I am curious how you will continue the story...

While I kind of like this story for being quite well written, I also hate it for glorifying an abusive relationship like this...
Snape in this story is the ultimate asshole and Hermione is the kicked puppy who loves him regardless and keeps coming back for more. It's absolutely unhealthy and toxic and it kind of makes me sad.
Well done for a quite original backstory and decent grammar though.

I loved this story. Thanks for writing it

Excellent story. I hope you have great success. Don't try to publish on your own without a Beta reader. A Beta reader would have been able to fix the plot holes. Toward the end, I kept wondering why they kept acting like idiots. Kissing in a public hallway, arguing in public after the dance. Arguing in the library. And her stupidity of going all over by herself was moronic. When she got kidnapped, nobody looked at Harry's map to find her. Melvin was underused. Snape never took advantage of the rooftop exit provided by the Room of Requirement, even though Bella used it easy enough.

Hahaha. I laugh at Draco's pain. NO SYMPATHY FOR HIM AT ALL IN THIS STORY. And as usual, I hate Albus.

Nobody thought to steal Harry's map. Oh-oh!

Confused heroes. Don't go anywhere alone vs come to me tomorrow night, alone.

Intense

Rotflmao

Good, good, good.

Oho!

Exciting stuff. Intriguing. Great beginning, with me coming up with all sorts of possible suspects sand plot ideas.

make a sequel lol

Excellente histoire et rondement menée, avec suspens et émotion.
Malgré cela, j'ai trouvé Severus un peu dense dans sa relation avec Hermione, alors que, même s'il est évidemment mal à l'aise et maladroit dans l'interaction sociale, j'attendais un peu plus de subtilité de la part d'un espion habitué à jouer double et à maîtriser ses émotions. En fait, c'est Hermione qui gère cela de la manière la plus adulte, alors qu'elle aurait mille fois plus de raison d'être traumatisée. Bref, je la trouve pour sa part un peu trop compréhensive face aux égarements de Snape et d'une manière générale, ce renversement de situation (à savoir que c'est elle l'adulte dans la relation) affaiblit un peu l'histoire. Mais cela reste relativement mineur comme critique car cela ne m'a pas empêchée de lire votre histoire d'une traite, impatiente d'en connaître le dénouement. Merci.

Very good