Reviews for Nightfall
Icha Icha Ichiraku chapter 70 . 11/6/2023
Itachi in this story - I killed my entire clan because they were arrogant and thought they were better than everyone. Now that I have new eye's and have evolved beyond I will never do the same.

Also Itachi in this chapter - Despite his apparent dominance Itachi had yet to attempt an attack on the pair.

"Something is off here, why don't you attack?" Konan finally asked.

"There is no point, a victory here serves me no purpose when I can simply tire you both out, I will be able to defeat you without wasting energy in attacking" Itachi explained.

This straight up makes no sense. Itachi should just destroy them and go help Naruto. The decision to have him do and say the things he does at that part of the chapter go directly against the kind of character you have built him up to be in this story. It appears additionally egregious when you take into consideration that Akaru JUST died like very very recently at the hands of the Akatsuki.
Icha Icha Ichiraku chapter 69 . 11/6/2023
This review is largely pointless as the story is finished and over, however I heavily disagree with the overall tone the narrative sets when establishing the battle ground for the coming fight between Naruto and Pain. There are a number of large factors both from your narrative and the story of canon that would make this fight seem WAY more skewed in the favor of Naruto and co, than what you have written would seem to indicate.

One aspect of this story that has been consistent throughout is the highlighting of important character development that runs against the expectation of canon. This has been very well delivered, and there seems to always be a good level of consideration taken into exactly how these changes are communicated. Within that space, there has been little in the way of exposition that would lead me as a reader to believe that the Pain of your story is different in terms of power and ability than the Pain of canon. In fact your Pain has been shown to be equally as self-aggrandizing, and ironically ignorant of his own fragility (like the man is just a Chakara battery held together by a machine), as the Pain of canon.

When you line that up with the development we have seen from Naruto, and the narrative scaling you have done to highlight exactly how much more powerful he is due to his new eyes, the fight is already weighted HEAVILY in the advantage of Naruto and co. This is true even when you take into consideration other aspects important to the fight, such as information on opponents battle capabilities, and the terrain the fight happens in.

Looking first at terrain, there is little in the way of important difference here. In canon, the fight happens in the desolation following the flattening of the village. Just a wide open space. Here the fight happens on a small island, but more specifically over a large lake. While water and earth are clearly not the same, the generalized setting of a large open space still holds. Nothing about the location of the battle would make me think Pain should have any advantage as compared to his canon self.

Next looking at information. One of the biggest advantages Pain had going into the fight with Naruto during Canon was the lack of information Naruto had on his abilities with the Rinnegan. Here that advantage should be completely eliminated, and should swing the fight directly into Naruto's favor as compared to canon.

Ultimately this is really the first time within this story's narrative that, as a reader, i felt there has been a direct dissonance between the information I have been presented and teased with, and the internal monologues and thoughts of the characters as they analyze a situation. While I understand the narrative need to have someone in opposition to Naruto, I don't think that there has been any realistic reason for a reader to believe Pain can offer that opposition at this point in time. Especially when we take into consideration that Naruto pre 3-year timeskip (he beat the 3-tail Kage in open combat...), was already stonger than the Naruto we see returning from the 3-year timeskip in canon. AND The 3 year training trip only made him even stronger...

Regardless, I hope that I am proven wrong in the next few chapters and Naruto and co don't somehow lose this fight...
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Guest chapter 1 . 9/21/2023
This fic has some interesting ideas that I appreciate, however, several character decisions struck me as off. Given the setting and lack of justification, they were just not tactically sound.
gogetadbzfanmanga chapter 157 . 9/19/2023
Canceled too?
Guest chapter 157 . 8/26/2023
Bro it's been so long update this bish its time for more content
Guest chapter 157 . 8/8/2023
Pls update man
boringmic chapter 47 . 7/4/2023
I can’t believe Pein called Tobi a good bot
Guest chapter 157 . 5/4/2023
PLESE UPDATE
Brian chapter 30 . 4/30/2023
Finally Mei kisses Naruto and acknowledges his looks. I hope this leads to their marriage.
Brian chapter 26 . 4/30/2023
No,no,no! No romance between Naruto and Fuu!
Brian chapter 25 . 4/30/2023
No complaints here. This chapter makes sense as the characters and world feels alive with stuff like this.
Brian chapter 24 . 4/30/2023
Definitely an exciting chapter! Still hoping for Mei and Naruto to marry.
Brian chapter 23 . 4/30/2023
Man Itachi is the man. I know, big surprise there. Keep this up.
Brian chapter 22 . 4/30/2023
Wow! Great setting up the story here. Mei finally appears! I hope she loves Naruto! Looking forward to the action.
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