|Reviews for Fire on the Sands|
| PGM2602 chapter 1 . 11/30/2012
OUCH! Better luck for your OC next time DU! Otherwise great fic!
| unknownmysteryguy chapter 1 . 2/5/2012
His bragging and mentioning of the mad scientist everytime it shows a new skill is annoying, but besides those this story has a very good introduction. I'd keep going with this if I was you.