Reviews for Bats, Foxes, and a Hornet
Guest chapter 7 . 4/22
Is it possible for you to continue the story. I'm enjoying it so much.
pat weakley chapter 4 . 2/15
Your story is an interesting read, but you should have taken more care with your spelling and grammar. That is really getting in the way of my enjoyment of the story. You have a lot of promise though.
Hennakara chapter 7 . 11/3/2014
Pleas wright more. I do not think I have laphed as hard as I did to any other story. Please wright more. I want to laph that hard.
SherlockWholmes chapter 7 . 5/5/2014
Great chapter! If almost forgotten about this story, and am so glad that you're going to finish it. My favorite stories are crossovers, especially if they're well done. And this is well done. Kudos!
Elic chapter 6 . 12/30/2013
Are you going to ever finish this? I'm enjoying it as I love cross overs!
Saphura chapter 6 . 11/17/2013
Oh man, Kato not driving the Black Beauty... I was dying of laughter during those parts! Nice to see this story updated, and looking forward to more!
SherlockWholmes chapter 6 . 11/17/2013
Thank you for coming back to this story. I love the Green Hornet and I love crossovers. This one is really good.
JanEyrEvanescence12 chapter 6 . 11/16/2013
Wow...that was much more intense than I hoped it would be, a nice mixture of camp and nail biting action. Nice to see the little things that tied in the Lone Ranger's past with the GH's. The interrogation scene was pretty intense and while I see how it could have worked with Cavendish, I think it being Catwoman makes it that more interesting because we haven't really seen many parts where the GH is intimidated by anybody but I think he would be by Catwoman.

Great job and I'm looking forward to more.
Avengers51 chapter 5 . 7/2/2013
I have to say that it is a great story. I am hooked. I so want you to continue the story. This story contains great hero's that I love. There needs to be more good Green Hornet stories.
Guest chapter 5 . 11/25/2012
where is the end you have me hooked i love this story...more please
William Morris chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
Awesome. I'm a fan of all of these character's and to see their stories intertwined like this is really cool. Thank you.
KG5133 chapter 4 . 7/20/2012
I really like your writing and storytelling styles. They match up very nicely with the styles of the Green Hornet and Batman shows of the '60s. And the characterization is awesome for an AU story.
SilverHowler chapter 3 . 1/31/2012
Another great chapter! Can't wait to see what'll happen next! :D
Saphura chapter 3 . 11/15/2011
Very interesting. Sounds like everyone wants to get a piece of Britt's father. You have a nice balance of seriousness, campiness, and tongue-in-cheek humor. Please continue!
IcyWaters chapter 1 . 10/16/2011
I was thrilled to read the summary to your story. Zorro, the Green Hornet and Batman are three of my favorite masked heroes. To see all of these characters entwine in an adventure is amazing. The connection with the Lone Ranger is icing on the cake. :-)

Barbara Gordon being a descendant of Don Diego de la Vega is a nice idea. It’s also interesting how Britt is unaware of his family history, making for a nice little twist.

As intriguing as this premise is, I admit to not finishing the first chapter. Lots of little things detracted from the overall mood and flow of the story. My biggest piece of advice is to find a good beta reader. This feels more like a rough draft than a final version. For example, you correctly wrote the surname ‘de la Vega’ in the opening scene and suddenly switched to ‘Del La Vega.’ Also, it’s Commissioner Gordon, not Commissar Gordon, unless Gotham is now located in the former USSR. :-)

When Juan calls Barbara, she said: "What are you doing in Century City? I thought you and Aunt Sophia would be in Hawaii by now!" – Juan never specifically said where he was, so how did Barbara know he was in Century City? Perhaps you meant to write: “What are you still doing in Century City?” (And is it Century City or Crescent City?)

Watch the contractions, too. "Can you place them in you're secret place?" – That should be your, not you’re. There are several instances of your/you’re mix-ups.

Also keep an eye on comma use. The introductory sentence threw me for a loop: Juan De La Vega, waited impatiently for Britt Reid to get off the phone, finally he hung up and said, "Mr. De La Vega, I know you have been managing my grandfather's estates for many years…"

The wording implies Juan is the one who hung up and spoke. Delete the first comma and separate this thought into two sentences: Juan de la Vega waited impatiently for Britt Reid to get off the phone. Finally, he hung up and said, “Mr. de la Vega, I know you have been managing my grandfather’s estates for many years…”

I don’t mean this to sound harsh. Quite the opposite. This story has great potential and I’d love to see it fully realized. Good luck!
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