Reviews for Naruto of the Salamander
kishinokurobi chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Good to see you update finally. I enjoyed the chapter even though it was devoid of action. Your writing as always is well worded and can draw me in.

I have a problem with on line here though: "He was still rubbing his stinging bicep, relived," The problem here should be obvious, he's a MAN! Men don't rub wounds or punches, let alone a slap. To quote man law:

"80. If a man is punched, and the hit is rubbed, he is punched again in the same area twice. "

It should apply doubly here. Geeze, he might as well get some tampons for his BLEEDING VAGINA at this point.

Joking aside it's pretty lame.

Overall great chapter though, and I appreciate flushing out Ino's character and not rushing the pairing.

Update soon,
-Elliot S
vincent1875 chapter 5 . 12/12/2012
Ok I assumed that nobody knew the scroll was taken so Naruto getting it is ok. However the fact that they did know that it was taken but that Naruto supposedly took it is ridiculous. ANBU isn't perfect is not a defense. They'd have to be completely incompetent in this scenario. Missing a scroll that you're looking for in a small apartment? Or is it just not checking the last known location of the thief for the stolen goods. Your examples don't match what you're trying to support either.

They seemed to know about Orochimaru's invasion to me. He pretty much told Anko about it saying "If you end the exam prematurely the village will be finished." Nagato's invasion is even more ridiculous as there's no logical way someone could stop him. He threw a path in, summon the rest, and started rampaging.

The Uchiha massacre doesn't work as an example because it assumes the ANBU would be in the village patrolling or something. That was the Uchiha's job at that point as the military police. Not to mention that Danzou was in on the massacre. He could have easily had ANBU attention diverted elsewhere. Itachi and Tobi are also S class ninja so them being able to pull something like that off makes some sense.
End counter argument/rant

Naruto's whining about the villagers and going off on the library lady was cringe worthy. Just unpleasant to read. Naruto simply doesn't come off as such a person.

I thought you said Naruto wouldn't be able to fight a jounin. While he might not be able to match someone like Kakashi, Kakashi doesn't represent the average jounin. Spamming hundreds of clones who can shoot out combination fire/wind jutsu seems like plenty to kill a jounin if he doesn't know where Naruto's real body is.
Decius23 chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Finally a new's about damn time!
bakapervert chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Thanks for the update.
RHatch89 chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
good update
vincent1875 chapter 4 . 12/12/2012
I hope that nobody realized that Mizuki took the scroll in the first place. As a matter of fact I find the whole thing kind of ridiculous. Mizuki steals a scroll full of precious village jutsu and instead of trying to escape immediately he takes the time to go to Naruto's house and fix himself some tea? He must have wanted to die.
TheBlackSeaReaper chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
thanks for updating this story. update soon please and good luck with the next chapter.
vincent1875 chapter 3 . 12/12/2012
How would a Salamander know the Goukakyuu no Jutsu? Canon wise only Uchiha have been shown to know that jutsu. Perhaps if an Uchiha held the contract in the distant past but you said only Hanzou was on it. At least now Naruto can claim the Salamanders as his to protect them.
Mzr90 chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Cool chapter can't wait for the next.
An Anonymous Gentleman chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
it's good to see this story getting updated again, it's been a while. hope you continue to update and can't wait for the story to progress.
an Anonymous Gentleman
NinjaGogeta chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Oh, thanks for the spoiler
vincent1875 chapter 2 . 12/12/2012
Still haven't found out why a ninja summon is waltzing around a foreign village like there's nothing strange about it. That's probably the most unbelievable thing about the story so far. Naruto should hurry up and sign a contract with them so that doesn't end up an issue. Not bad as far as the chapter goes.
Orchamus chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Huh, Naruto certainly has sharper senses in this, other than a slight chill in the air and a quick flash of steel Haku was pretty low on the threat meter. Yet still he feels off. Good chapter for a bit more Naru/Ino interaction.
0 Jordinio 0 chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Decent chapter, although you tend to do this way to much - hello -.
george17 chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Well, that was one seriously emo chapter.
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