|Reviews for Roanoke by Night|
| Evangel Tepes chapter 1 . 10/16/2011
Hmm... Well, it's very short, and introduces a character with a lot of terms and things I assume are loyal to the main series...
With a chapter this short it's hard to tell what kind of storyline you are setting up, so that may hook some readers to come back and view updates to find out, whereas it may also repel others.
You may find yourself needing to more descriptively provide the settings of where the story takes place, since you are making a story that in fact takes place in a real place on Earth, as opposed to a setting in an anime that everyone reading the fic will already know (but that is entirely up to you and your skills as a writer).
The character doesn't have much character for now, if you catch my drift. There's not much backstory or history yet, so just a reminder to make sure you work on that as you progress in the story.
I think you have an interesting start, at the least, and I'd be interested to see where you go from here.