Reviews for Sorrow II
Lightning Catastrophe chapter 1 . 10/17/2011
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l'm sad to say l can COMPLETELY relate with Mion on this one. 100%.
Michael S. Repton chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
Another of your excellent Mion fics. You really capture her inner feelings perfectly. (Oddly enough, in the stage I've reached at the moment in my story, I'm also writing about Mion showing these feelings, but with Shion as the narrator, so our two stories are like mirror images of each other.) The writing and pacing are very good, and I particularly like the way the emotion gets stronger throughout the story until Mion almost breaks down at the end, which really draws the reader in and makes us ache for her, or at least it did for me.

Just a couple of small errors: "getting better along" should be "getting along better", and in the warning at the top, "first" should be "last". An ellipsis should always be three full stops.

Thank you for writing this, and as always I look forward to whatever's next, whether it's another short one or more Kurushi-hen, they are equally welcome!