This story is cringe no bad stuff aloud Zae misson oh no very bad sir how could you hurt innocent people guardsmen checking an eldar is okay because feelings everyone always laughing going on shopping trips always being kind ik I'm sounding like a neckbeard here but you are using mass effect and warhammer and yet I feel like I'm reading some anime power of friendship bs where everyone is always kind and helpful and people bad for not being white knights overall I just find this story boring and sickly cringe with its constant let's all me friends and help each other attitude which is in your face every single chapter

Overall great story

One small change I would propose is simply to change the false vision to a real vision. The emperors goal is the continuation of humanity if aliens are willing to be is willing to spare them. As seen in the age before the imperium in which humanity was betrayed.

Hope if it’s continued that the emperor(MA universe) will appear in the background.

Would also be an opportunity for the Eldar and Sheppard to see why humanity sees the emperor as salvation.

If you don’t continue that’s also cool then I wish good luck for your life and future projects

shepard is disgusting in this fic, netflix coloring

This story is bloody phenomenal lad, I noticed some clowns say you (as you, the new author) somehow ruined this? I don't understand how, as I read the entire thing many times before writing a review, and there is practically no difference, between you and the original, so don't take what there saying seriously lad, your just as good as the original guy, I wish you luck lad, and I look forward to how this continues, if I may, but can we get some more story time from the good captain August? such as him Telling the crew of Abhumans, like those of ogryns and ratlings, personally my favorite aspects of the guard, keep up the good work lad!

I love this story! I really like how you have showed Maetris' abilities

really hope for more chapters! :)

This is going to be a contentious oinion, but I much prefer he second author the first. They got the thene and feel of 40k down and made hebstory feel more grounded.

Very promising so far. Out of curiosity, will you be continuing this story?

One big problem with this story. Gallardi knows WAY too much for someone who supposed to be "just another trooper". The guy is not even a high level operative in Inquisition and yet he somehow knows all about freaking Horus Heresy? That makes no sense at all.

I was someone who originally disliked the change in tone after the author swap. But having come back to this story again and re-read the entire thing in one go I can say that honestly I think the new author is doing a really good job. I haven't felt that any of the characters have changed dramaticly. And I rememeber from reading the original authors draft plan that the key points remain. Thankyou for continuing this and I hope you pick it up again.

After 21, the tone of the story really changed for the worst. Its unfortunate the old author left this unfinished because this has a good premise and potential.

New author absolutely ruined the story :c

Can't say i don't undertand why this is dead. It was pretty obvious who August was paired with, but after this move i can't see anything but a bad end.

She saved his life with this fake vision, trampling over the faith he and everyone he cares about sarcrificed so much for, making him a true heretic and all that without even his knowledge or consent, which means she even took his freedom and choice and she sure as hell didn't do it because she cared. No, only because he is useful pawn in her own agenda against the reapers.

August was 100% right not to trust her. There is no relationship to be salvaged or formed, this a dead end. This can only end in bloodshed.

You need to stick to one name for August, it's confusing

Nice

Nice chapter