|Reviews for The Next Heir|
| Hibiscus Girl chapter 3 . 12/24/2012
may i ask for the next chapter? plez...
| ShinigamiinPeru chapter 3 . 7/24/2012
I had fun reading it and was hooked to it. Hope there is more. Update soon. :3
| kira86 chapter 3 . 11/5/2011
| Denizen Of Madness chapter 3 . 10/8/2011
Um, Grandpa's name is spelled SHIGEMORI. Kaida, you will soon face the insanity of grandpa shige soon... don't go mad on us.
| Storyteller Shell chapter 3 . 10/7/2011
| Denizen Of Madness chapter 2 . 10/7/2011
To be honest, I didn't expect you to update this quickly. Your'e doing a good job so far. Good luck with Grandpa, Kaida, your'e gonna need it.
| Storyteller Shell chapter 2 . 10/6/2011
| Denizen of madness chapter 1 . 10/6/2011
Hi. Apparently, you can't review a chapter twice, so That's why I'm reviewing like this. Anyway, This has turned out to be better thatn the first version. The spelling and grammar has improved, and things are explained a little better. Keep up the good work.
PS Their last name is spelled as Sumimura, but that's pretty much the only thing wrong. Keep it up _
| Storyteller Shell chapter 1 . 10/6/2011
| Denizen Of Madness chapter 1 . 10/5/2011
Okay, this is not meant to be a flame, but a bit of criticism.
First, you had some spelling mistakes. It's not Sumimora, It's Summimura.
Second, Your character is almost borderline Mary-Sue. She has an unusual name, and is related to a canon character. You also don't need to add a middle name to her. Most people don't use that. Doesn't she have any family? I don't think social services would allow a tenth grader to live all alone.
Are you going to explain why she's going to Japan? Also, I don't think she acted right when she got that phone call. If some stranger calls to tell you that your going to miss an appointment, I would question as to how they knew that.
For the most part, this story has potential. Just slow down and look for errors, and try to keep your character from being a Sue.
| Jeice chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
:D Its about time you made a Kekkashi story. JK. Happy upcoming birthday, and I think October is a beautiful name. At first I was like: "Okay... Weird name..." But, it kinda grew on me. It didn't see rushed at all, and interesting that October is a... I'll stop talking now. I noticed a few spelling errors, but still good none the less.