Reviews for My story
The Dark Deceiver chapter 1 . 10/5/2011
Eh. I recommend changing the format big time, checking your grammar, and capping every I you make.

I also recommend checking to make sure that what your writing is appropriate for the rating you set.

And I don't think that Kyon would stare at Mikuru when she was naked. He freaks out every time he sees her scantly clad.

That's all the constructive criticism I have.