Reviews for Forever is a Long Time
TLD110166 chapter 5 . 4/23
Interesting story. What's Hermione's problem?
RonRR chapter 16 . 4/1
Still major time issues.

Several weeks after Minerva is released from the hospital wing which is a few days after the first task in very early January, the third task occurs, placing it in mid to late January. Cedric's memorial is a few days later and the students head home the next day with the school year over before January even ends.

Please be more mindful of the passage of time. A plot calender with events laid out would be a good aid to make sure appropriate lenths of time are mentioned between events. As currently written, the school year ends around the end of January.

Thank you for writing,

Ron
RonRR chapter 14 . 4/1
Crouch is taken to hospital wing by Hagrid and then suddenly disappears again? The entire conversation with the minister is very unclears as to what events have occured.

Thank you for writing,

Ron
RonRR chapter 13 . 4/1
Why is Harry looking for Minerva underwater before he even discovers that it is hostages as opposed to items that have been taken?

Please be aware of the difference between author and reader knowledge verses character knowledge.

Thank you for writing,

Ron
RonRR chapter 12 . 4/1
Apparently the Yule ball should have been renamed the New Year's ball since classes started 2 days later.
Also, it seems the first task is 6 plus weeks earlier than in canon occuring in the first week of January instead of late February. Only more reading will reveal whether this is true or yet another strange time dialation/error has occured.

Thank you for writing,

Ron
RonRR chapter 9 . 4/1
you need to set up a calender and start tracking time for your events. From your own descriptions of the passage of time, several months after the name draw in early September it is still 4 weeks until the first task. This puts the task around the canon date: late November. The dance lesssons above take place when the notice for the Yule ball is posted a little over a month after the task; that places these lessons in late December, which is after Christmas.

Consitency with in a story is important.

Thank you for writing,

Ron
RonRR chapter 4 . 4/1
So much for the choosing of the champions being on Halloween as indicated in chapter 1. Unless Halloween has been moved to the first week of September.

Thank you for writing,

Ron
RonRR chapter 1 . 4/1
After making a big deal about the empty seat and missing defense professor, you the failed to note Moody's arrival. He is just suddenly present after Dumbledore is done speaking about the tournament. I assume he arrives as is canon. However, if you were going to ignore his arrival as we the readers already know what happened because it is like the books, then you should have also ignored the build up towards his arrival and made no note of the empty seat and missing professor as they would similarily be as already known.

Thank you for writing,

Ron
Guest chapter 30 . 3/31
I love this story! Update soon please!
Yaw613 chapter 30 . 3/28
Please write the next chapter already. I really liked it and appreciate it a lot. Thank you very much.
SchaMG chapter 30 . 3/7
Awesome i can't wait more
mwinter1 chapter 30 . 1/29
Awaiting more
stoneley chapter 30 . 1/29
I had had an idea. Like Minerva still is an Animagus, could she teach Harry and the others to be ones too? Maybe in the story as Harry wanting to be closer to his dad or something?

Love the story. Keep up the good work. A truly unique story!
Sakura Lisel chapter 12 . 1/28
I don't see why Minerva is getting upset about the whole kissing Harry thing. Thanks to Peeves PERMANENT deaging potion, its not like shes legally STILL a middle aged woman whos a teacher thats illegally having a romance with her student. Unless that potion actually eventually DOES wear off or somebody DOES eventually find a cure for the potion she got splashed with, the only thing she can do now is grow up all over again the old fashioned way. *lol* Plus unless shes going to become what counts for a nun in the magical world and remain celibate during her second childhood and future second adulthood, she should consider taking a look at the new generation of eligible young men, like Harry. She should enjoy her second childhood especially if there is no available cure that will instantly physically return her to her to her true age.
PMakepeace98 chapter 31 . 1/18
Hiya, great chapter, are you going to update any time soon? Need to read more!
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