|Reviews for Witches! The Pokedex Holders Edition|
| Guest chapter 2 . 9/14/2014
That was mean guys...
Don't any of you think it's mean?!
| vee the espeon chapter 2 . 12/29/2013
sooo, when does chapter 3 is coming?
| Pie bro chapter 2 . 3/3/2013
Not bad for a one-shot, I thought it was suspenseful! And I've never read the manga, I just like Teh characters.
| Alecy Magix chapter 2 . 8/13/2012
| Farla chapter 1 . 10/31/2011
[One fine day, the boys of the Drechenaux (that's what I call the Pokedex Holders. Prounounced Dreh-ch-nox.)]
If it's not what they're called, then it's not what they're called. And if you have to take two extra sentences to explain what your term is, you've completely missed the point.
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it." And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
[It was a picture of Blue, Crystal, Yellow, Sapphire, Platina and White, all in witch costumes. They were all gathered around a cauldron, and the sky behind them was dark, and a few Shuppet and Duskull were gathered around them. That wasn't what was freaky, rather it was their expressions. They were are cackling, except Platina who had her eyes closed and was gazing up at the sky. ]
["The photo looks too real."
"I'd say it's just computer graphics, but nothing could make a photo look like that." Green said.
"So, do you think, that they're really witches?" Pearl thought.
"Witches don't really exist." Red said, though he was a bit unsure looking at the photograph]
First, dressing up in a costume doesn't make you a witch. Second, don't use "thought" for a character's speech.
This is inane, tedious and doesn't seem to have anything to do with canon. It's just a random plot that happens to have characters sharing the canon cast's names.
| aznpandagrl chapter 2 . 10/9/2011
Ohhh angry Blueeee~~~~~
And some have two boys others have three... You should make longer chapters, and quick update, that's a good quality
| aznpandagrl chapter 1 . 10/9/2011
AWWW MANIPULATION THE COMMONERSHIPPING OH WOE.
This is still a good idea, they aren't cutesy magic girls who flaunt and gallivant around in short skirts. Although that makes a cute story too
| ZXCVBNMEM chapter 2 . 10/8/2011
Interesting! Is there a story behind the witch business?
| xxx chapter 1 . 10/8/2011
lol this was a funny fic. Boys are easy to mess with XD.
| SpecialPikachu chapter 1 . 10/7/2011
Wow! Your story is so interesting, unique!
I can't wait for the next chapter