Reviews for The Story of Adalina
Annie Anon chapter 1 . 4/25/2012
Hey, I don't want to offend you but i feel your story was rushed and tbh I had no idea what it was on about...

But it was a good first attempt... I think next time try to have more detail, feelings and just take your time to really entrance people with your story/chapter/scene. I would also try to avoid using text language in your writing... after all your not a phone ;) :P

Well better luck next time, I'm sure you'll do better :)
x-ema-x chapter 4 . 3/24/2012

• spelling

• punctuation

• grammar

• don't use text speak

But apart from that, cool story!
Mrs. Frank Hardy chapter 4 . 11/9/2011
TheQueenOfPickles chapter 4 . 11/8/2011
Umm...i think ur talking in txet again... Lol well, for u making me wait so long for a small chapter, i will get u bak at skool. Watch ur back lol.
TheQueenOfPickles chapter 3 . 11/2/2011
Omg! I wrote this chapter! Lol had to point it out, considering it is my character :) welllllll... Im good...
Mrs. Frank Hardy chapter 3 . 10/31/2011
I like the informal thought bubbles. :) You did a really wonderful job on this chapter. I hope you'll countinue!

Mrs. Frank Hardy
Mrs. Frank Hardy chapter 2 . 10/18/2011
durn! i hate cliffhangers! tell me when ch. 3 is up?
Mrs. Frank Hardy chapter 1 . 10/10/2011
The randomness of your story makes it my kind of story. I love that you include Laurel in this!

More! ;0

~Mrs. Frank Hardy
TheQueenOfPickles chapter 1 . 10/9/2011
YAY! I GET TO BE YOUR FIRST REVIEW. Ok, now that thats settled, I need you to quickly type up the next chapter or you are doomed. Okay? Cause guess what? I know where you live...