|Reviews for As You Turn Away|
| redmangobliss95 chapter 1 . 6/3/2012
I can definitely see how Jesse would think of writing a letter instead of texting or emailing knowing he and Rachel both tend to love being drama royalties. The choice of using a letter also increased the impact of Jesse's genuine mindset for Rachel not to mention the suspense it created in the beginning. That was a good one.
I especially adored this part:
"You're in love with the idea of Finn, not the real Finn."
I can see Jesse being an adult and letting go however difficult a decision it was for him. It is implied too that Rachel loved him and not Finn actually. That was great.
It wasn't as angsty as I thought. Keep writing! :)
| Cris chapter 1 . 1/10/2012
Well, I am beyond late with reviewing, but unfortunately that tends to be my MO. How have you been? Hope you had a great holiday!
I don’t see much epistolary fanfiction around, so this was a little unusual (i.e. refreshing!) for that reason alone.
That first line of Jesse’s letter was too epic – he KNOWS her so well! Of course he’d know that she’d completely panic and blow things out of proportion. Though, to be fair to her, she had good reason for thinking he’d be furious at her.
Jesse is being remarkably understanding about all of this, and while at first I’d agree with his assumptions of Rachel’s response and doubt that Jesse St. James really would say things like this, on the flip side, he IS more mature now, and after having lost her once and realizing how awful that felt and what she means to him, I think he is capable of this sort of sacrifice. And while the dramatic part of Rachel might enjoy watching the two boys fight over her, I think in the end she’ll be more swayed by Jesse respecting her decision for the time being, and being willing to wait for her to change her mind on her own.
I’ve heard the comment that Rachel is really in love with the idea of Finn, not the boy himself, before, but I really think it’s perfectly apt for this situation. Finn isn’t and can never be what she needs, but Jesse can if they both let themselves mature and believe it enough.
I wouldn’t mind you trying your hand at more St. Berry, if you ever find the time!
| auhaes23 chapter 1 . 10/12/2011
So beautiful and so realist ! just loved it
| northstar61 chapter 1 . 10/11/2011
Sniffle. This was sad, but beautiful. I could see Jesse writing something like this to Rachel, letting her know that he understood why she had to be with Finn, but that he couldn't stay around to watch it. As he said, it's simply not their time - but their time will come. Eventually, they'll both be in the right place, and their futures will merge. They are destined to be together.
The song was a perfect expression of Jesse's feelings, and it made me tear up - as did parts of his letter. Congratulations on writing such a moving piece.
| bouquineuse chapter 1 . 10/11/2011
Very nicely done! I too would like to see a sequel set about 8 or 10 years later if you feel the inspiration.
I thought you really summarized matters well about Finn & Rachel & Jesse in these statements:
"Realistically, you and Finn are too different. You both want vastly different things out of life and you won't be able to love anyone else until you let this run its course and see that for yourself. You're in love with the idea of Finn, not the real Finn." This rang particularly true as I fell for a "Finn" i.e a dumb jock (though much much better looking than Finn)in high school. I wasted a year before I realized the guy was actually nothing like my fantasy of him and we had almost nothing in common.
"I am not going to write or call to try and keep my memory alive in your head and your heart. I believe in what we share deep down inside and we don't need that. We both need this time and this space apart to do what we need to do." Yes, they are both too young right now but there is that bond, that ability to totally get each other and treat each other's dreams as valid and worthy. Which is why I ship St. Berry forever.
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/11/2011
| MissTrubiex chapter 1 . 10/11/2011
First off, I'm so touched by the dedication. Love you!
And you need to write more because that was wonderful. I could hear Jesse speaking those words. Everything you wrote as Jesse is true as far as I'm concerned.
I think you should write a sequel; their reunion!
Lots of love xxx