|Reviews for Confessional|
| Negotiator In Time chapter 1 . 10/30/2011
Hmm. Not really sure what is going on here. It is a little confusing. You start off in first person, 'I thought I could get through to him...' then change to third person..'He'd met a good one before...' and then all of a sudden you start with ..'She wanted..' You might need to rewrite that part.
The title doesn't seem to have much to do with this piece of writing either.
When writing such a very short piece, you do need to get your punctuation right ("I want to stop this, but I can't we have to keep fighting as we have no choice." That should be two sentences.) as well as spellings (enemy not enermy). Remember that proper nouns have capital letters, for example: Captain Scarlet and Mars.