|Reviews for Lucario and the Mysterious Magician of Paris|
| xXLadySapphireXx chapter 1 . 10/13/2013
| sirimiri chapter 1 . 6/2/2013
There are only two things I can think of for improvement. First, the grammar. For example, "he feel," when I believe you meant "he felt," or "he feels." Secondly, while I do enjoy considerably long sex scenes, I don't like them when they're too long and drawn out. (But this is simply my personal opinion.)
Also, to surprise the reader when Facilier shows Gackt the newspaper, I would've kept the scene where Facilier transforms into Gackt out. So then I believe it's a considerable sharp turn in events, because he is trapped. But I don't think that changes much.
Onto the things I would like to compliment specifically, I enjoyed the long, detailed description when Lucinda is introduced, from where Facilier had met him to why he was in the basement in the first place. I also really liked the changing of Gackt's name in the text to his new name shortly after he's given it. I think it adds on to how he gives completely.
I quite enjoyed it. I will probably be re-reading it again soon.
| Rilu starlight chapter 1 . 5/30/2013
ALL OFF MY YES
| Gage chapter 1 . 3/30/2013
It was well written, but its lacked alot of detail in terms of the environment. It could have used more descriptive languge in that way! Also, i dont really see how gackt could have just Fallin in love like that, again during the BDSM scene, and i was sort of hoping that he was trying to trick falicier into trusting him, so he could escape or kill him. But over all it was a wondeful story! Great job with the description of the sex scenes, and the description of the characters was perfect!
| A.K.M Fahim Shahriar Khan chapter 1 . 1/2/2013
Great Job ! Even I am straight, I still enjoy reading Yaoi ! And, a surprise ! I have a perfectly matching pic for this story ! Here: .
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/29/2012
| radom person chapter 1 . 12/12/2012
make it a movie
| Amaterasu Masami chapter 1 . 12/8/2012
So awesomely great!
| skeilerknight chapter 1 . 12/4/2012
liked and loved it.
was still alittle question of how time didnt pass of utsukushi accepting his new lifstyle
but still it was great.
| hugomiguel.santos.71 chapter 1 . 11/14/2012
Man this story alone is a f%#ing chronicle coulnd't stop reading from 21:25 till 22:00 i mean almost an hour and reading it on my DSi is no picnic but keep up the good work *thumbs up* -
| Zoroarkcuddlesx3 chapter 1 . 11/12/2012
This story is pretty good, im new here so dont take my criticism the wrong way, I cummed at least twice while reading this lol. Im also looking for a partnership so plz right me back if you wanna be partners...
| VanHorn chapter 1 . 10/30/2012
I constantly complement you on your work, but this one was just simply amazing. I love your work! :DDD I go to sleep reading your stories in hopes that I'll dream them as I saw them in my mind. Beautiful story, lovely details, astonishing plot, and it kept me reading for about a good hour! :DD I cannot wait till' tomorrow night! It's 12:53 am right now and I have to get ready for school at 6 / can't... stop... now... No internet connections at school! DD: Thank you so much for this outstanding piece! It was absolutely wonderful! -
| A Yaoi Reader chapter 1 . 10/18/2012
The story was okay, but the grammar is lacking. I can understand if you're not English, though, and if you weren't it was a fantastic yiff. The story was lacking, but most people don't come here for those.
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/9/2012
That was really good
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/5/2012
great but couldnt you have left out the embarrasing parts?