Bring on chapter 2

Wow! For a first story, this is pretty god! I've never seen this show, but now I've read this, I think I will! Great job!

Very hot

All I can say is that I wish it was longer, and don't be afraid to put a bit more detail in.

I wish I could find more of this pairing on the internet, but I've looked everywhere and this is the only one I can find...

Well, seeing as this is my favorite .Hack:/Legend of The Twilight (I forget if thats the actual name) pairing, I have to say I liked it. It was a little short, but, it's your first one, and I have to admit, I write short fics too sometimes. I like how close to one of my not yet finished oneshots this is, lol. But I think you have a good chance at being a good writer on this site. Not that I'm one to judge. Keep it up )

you have ruined my pants

good story and who wouldnt love the lemon part

Hurry up

It was a great little story. I was love to see it as more than a oneshot.

Nice to see a shugo/rena story, but it's not much more than a lemon. Which is fine, it works as that.