|Reviews for Untangling the Webs by Neoxphile & Faerax|
| lynn77424 chapter 1 . 1/4
Taking a bit to catch up. So far, LOVE IT! Keep it up! :)
| DixieSiryn chapter 9 . 2/18/2013
Note to Faerax: "whiskey-flavored" voices are my second favorite kind. Think George Jones, or Etta James. My favorite kind of voice? Those that sound like a logging chain being dragged over a gravel road. Think Tom Waits or Ron Perlman.
I, for one, appreciate the imagery.
| DixieSiryn chapter 3 . 2/17/2013
Leaving a comment so as to encourage continued progress:
Loving it. I don't care if it isn't canon. You are writing what makes you happy and you are doing it well.
Keep up the good work. :-)
| Anony-mouse chapter 2 . 2/16/2013
FINALLY! A Haven fic that delves into characters, their motives, their thoughts, their actions and some descriptive sceneary and a fan fiction that is just generally well-written! As for Audrey wondering why NAthan always drives his Bronco - I'd just be thankful that i didn't have to pay any gas money haha!
| Anne Nonymus chapter 52 . 1/21/2013
Can't wait to read it!
| MagPie003 chapter 52 . 1/20/2013
Can't wait to see the new fic roll out.
| Evelyn-Sunshine chapter 52 . 1/18/2013
Yay! Very excited! I'm bad about posting reviews, but I'm never disappointed with what I read from you guys!
| Evangeline-Sibeliah chapter 1 . 1/6/2013
Oh man, I was really looking forward to reading a long Duke/Audrey story, but the pacing in the first chapter is soooo slooow I lost interest before I finished it.
Why is there so much padding in this? "With her pants loose around her waist, she took the phone from her ear and disconnected. She tossed the phone on her bed and proceeded to finish getting dressed." Who wants to read that? "He ascended the stairs and found his way to the Land Rover. He started up the car and drove to the home." Of course he didn't fly there, the scene could've been cut much sooner. Or the several paragraphs about how she had to find her way to the crime scene - that could've been expressed in 2 sentences tops, or hell, just leaving her dialogue with Nathan about it would've been enough - we get it, move on.
I get that the chapter is supposed to be a well-written recreation of an episode: the opening scene, the morning scene, the introduction to the case... You basically created a script in your heads and then wrote it down in prose where every look or frown on characters' faces becomes inner monologuing and every two-second establishing shot becomes a two-paragraph description. And it's SO SLOW, especially for a fanfiction. My expectations are that fanfictions are a little faster that the original because they usually focus on one or a couple of aspects of the original, not on everything (unless they're "general" - I recommend putting that into your category instead of "adventure"). This fanfiction is even slower than the original.
Of course, I could do what many people do and start skipping scenes while looking for the good ones where stuff happens, but I thought you should know.
Does this story get more dynamic in later chapters? If yes, I might give it a try, picking through a text is not my idea of fun but the later chapters might be worth it.
| Anne Nonymus chapter 29 . 1/2/2013
Have to say I'm kinda upset at you guys, you should put a warning at the beginning of the chapter for those with respiratory issues. Took me a while to read this because I'd start laughing and I'd have to stop and take a break.
That being said, I love the way that you write Dwight and Duke together. Sheer comedic genius! "It works for Jet Li and Jackie Chan" had me in fits. You capture their characters so bloody brilliantly, even better than on the show. And I love that bit with Audrey trying to charm her captors at the end.
Again, just have to say that I love your story even better than the show.
| nightshadowlife chapter 51 . 11/4/2012
This is the first Haven fic I've ever read, and considering I started watching the show and am now caught up to the current episode only 4 days ago that's saying something! I love it and can't wait to check out what else you awesome authors have written!
| Guest chapter 39 . 10/19/2012
"...she'd pop back up like Michael Myers."
Audrey's brow wrinkled in confusion. "The guy in the Austin Power movies?"
"Ha! No, the bad guy in the Friday the Thirteenth movies."
I'm thinking that this was done on purpose, but if not then: Micheal Myers was the bad guy in the Halloween series, whereas Jason (and Jason's mom) were the bad guy(s) in the Friday the 13th series. Apologies if this has already been pointed out in another review.
| Evelyn-Sunshine chapter 51 . 9/29/2012
I finished reading this a few days ago and remembered I forgot to mention how much I enjoyed it, Schroedinger's woman and all. I would like a sequel almost as much as I would like this to have been the actual show, but you have other stories I'm also looking forward to, so it's all good.
| kira66 chapter 51 . 9/24/2012
I used to be a fan of Nathan/Audrey; since the very first episode actually. But after seeing 301 it kinda felt wrong. Even with the short interaction between her and Duke they had more chemistry than her and Nathan ever had. So I'm a convert, heh. Duke's cuter anyways. :)
| flaimingdarkfox chapter 51 . 9/22/2012
no dont stop there
| tamilnadu09 chapter 51 . 9/22/2012
whew, well you managed to crank out this fic before the season premiere, and for that i must offer my congratulations :D i've never read a multi-chapter Haven fic before (just one shots of Nathan/Audrey) so kudos for keeping me on my toes for 51 chapters (and a Duke/Audrey fic at that!). anyway, now i'm off to watch the season premiere! be sure to tweet me when you guys write your next Haven fic. thanks for the summer entertainment!