Reviews for MilleFeuille
xXxNaru-LovexXx chapter 1 . 12/31/2014
I flipped through the doujinshi on Tumblr before I read this version - I love them both, this one maybe a little bit more. ;) I love the way you wrote everything out, especially the part when the servants came over to the door XDDD priceless! I love it so much and I hope that your other works are just as good as this one
DragonFire Princess chapter 1 . 2/13/2014
LOL!
Dev chapter 1 . 11/7/2013
Omiholinessthatwasanamazingfanfic! I looked through the doujinshi that I obviously didn't understand, but you put the words in like that was the translation! I love it!
ChibiKitsuneOfEgypt chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
I love ths doujin and love the spin you took on it. Nicely done.
Kuro-Otaku292 chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
o.k that was extreme, u went into way to much detail for my liking considering iam only OH HECK THT WAS BLOODY AWESOME,(even thought like you said u were just translating or predicting)
Sakura chapter 1 . 2/3/2013
Oh my bloody hell 3 This is very well written ! I love both the doujinshi and this story! :3 I could never turn a doujinshi into a fanfiction I would end up failing or it'll take god knows how long XD
Oh yes I think I had a.. Oh yes I had a nosebleed from this w Sebastian x Ciel forever 3 I read this fanfiction a lot since I love it so much.
Keep up the good work!
AnimatedPotatoe chapter 1 . 1/15/2013
Oh how I hope it gets translated! You did a very nice job of writing this, my friend.
I would have LOOOOVVVVVEEEEEDDDD it if Finny and Bard actually DID find out what was making that "noise." *nudgenudge* ;3
Naughty miss Alice chapter 1 . 1/11/2013
I read the doujinshi in Japanese and could not understand a thing! Thanks for making it clear even if it's not accurate :")
Looking forward to more stories by you...

-Naughty miss alice
xxx
TheClockworkFaerie chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
Okay, hearing Sebastian call Ciel "Bocchan" is kinda unnerving and I feel very violated considering that my friends call me "Bocchan," so every time I'm like, "THIS ISN'T ME, THIS ISN'T ME, I DO NOT WANT. DO NOT WANT." and flip out.

It's very well written. The end was funny; Ciel's reaction. Pfffft; perfect.

... This is the first time I've willingly let myself read a yaoi. I feel... I dunno. I usually don't read yaoi, but for some reason, this one drew me in.
Remote Control Trancy chapter 1 . 5/20/2012
Oh, wow, I'm usually not into Fanfics like this when people sort of re-write doujinshis, but I really like the way you did it! : D It must have been hard to write out when you don't know what they're saying, so good job on this, I enjoyed reading it! c:
Kirimi Phantomhive Nekozawa chapter 1 . 4/9/2012
So. I just read the donjinshi for this. I can read Japanese, and you did very well. Like scarily well.
XxAngel-eyez-for-youxX chapter 1 . 4/8/2012
OMFG! *nose bleed* o/o o.O! that was so delicious! all of the lemony goodness! loved it!
Kenn-chan chapter 1 . 12/3/2011
This was so sexy and cute. The ending honestly put a little smile on my face. Nice work!

Kenn-chan
RemindsmeofaWestSideStory chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Bassy is such a naughty demon! Grell must be so jealous of the young Master.

Love this xD
Ischagoras chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
**someone who can read Japanese**

You're actually not too far off from the original story! And well done, I might add. In the original story, Ciel wanders down to Sebastian's room saying he just went for a walk, Sebastian refuses to believe this and insists that Ciel REALLY came for a "booty call." He also compares Ciel to being a dog with a strong nose that was able to find him, Ciel dislikes this and says don't you like cats anyway? So Sebastian tries to get Ciel to act like a cat for a moment, to no avail.

Sebastian: Wandering all the way down to the servant's quarters at this hour when you could have just sent for me and I would have come to your room! If Tanaka finds out about this I'll be scolded! ... if this wasn't a booty call, that is.

Ciel: I TOLD YOU I WAS GOING FOR A WALK AND GOT LOST, DAMNIT

Bard and Finny show up because they want to ask Sebastian's permission to take a bath first, though Bard thinks that Sebastian is acting strange and accuses him of masturbating but Sebastian says he's been keeping a cat in his room and that's all it is (The whole masturbation thing is lost on Finny, though)

Where the outfit came from isn't too clear though since Sebastian whispers it to Ciel why he has it and it's omitted, but Ciel ends up calling him a pervert for it either way. Ciel also asks if he's Sebastian's mannequin/doll at first so Sebastian tries to get him to play along as a doll, but Ciel doesn't really do it.

Before they move to the bed, Sebastian asks Ciel to look at his .. erm, you know. lol. Ciel refuses saying if he does that then he'll also be asked to touch it etc, Sebastian replies to this by saying he won't make him do anything he doesn't want to do because his purpose is only to serve the young master's wants, etc.

XXX Round 1:

Ciel: Don't move, I'll come! It's big/I'm full! lots of moaning

Sebastian: THIS IS AMAZING (more or less, lol)

XXX Round 2:

Ciel: Mostly saying Sebastian's name/moaning

Sebastian: He came inside Ciel during XXX Round 1 so decides to talk about the sound it's now making thanks to that...lol

At the end of this, Ciel asks Sebastian to stay that way/with him more/longer and wakes up in his own bed the next day because Sebastian had carried him back after he fell asleep.

END:

Sebastian says if he was only ordered, he'd never leave Ciel's side - this makes Ciel angry and he says he won't give such an order, so Sebastian says, Oh, well, you'll have to endure it then! Ciel: ?

I hope that helps!
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