Reviews for Why
smartkid37 chapter 1 . 1/28/2013
nicely done

formatting help would make it much easier and smoother to read though.

wonderfully told, otherwise.
LittleMissDramaticDreams chapter 1 . 1/28/2012
This was good :) I liked you're ideas :) Maybe next time you could try using dialogue rather than a re-count form. But either way, I really liked this :) please keep writing :)
SmellyThePirate chapter 1 . 12/1/2011
Nice story! I like.
miss random chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
Punctuation is your friend! Next time, make sure you use quotation marks and periods, because its hard to read without them.
Gottahavemyncis chapter 1 . 10/26/2011
Your story is very sweet and I'm so glad Tim went to Gibbs and that Gibbs listened & helped him.
VioletHawk chapter 1 . 10/25/2011
I like how Gibbs is there for Tim like his father never was :)
musicjumper28 chapter 1 . 10/24/2011
You have great potential. Try to remember quotes when people are talking. Also, correct endings, like a period at the end of a sentence. All together, not bad for a first timer.