Reviews for Chronicles
Guest chapter 1 . 9/24/2016
I really didn't like that it was more about red than the others but I know you tried to stick on one shipping but if your doing that then you shouldn't bother putting other ships or just making them slight or just add occs lol
Twinfeather chapter 11 . 1/17/2015
Fang bless you.
Just Another Kid chapter 11 . 1/15/2015
I also forgot to mention you poor thing having to deal with exams also the chapter pretty interesting a bit creeped out by the the weird gas but looking back it's unique I don't think I'll be comfortable with laughing gas anymore Yellow challenging Red was quite unexpected though. You know I was drinking water at the time I probably would'vespit it out in surprise. The battle was interesting for sure! Like I said in the last review I put I pumped for the next chapter and for the other characters to come in *imagines Blue coning Red* I really need to stop thinking about that. Wow, this review is pretty short compared to what I'm used to!

PS Sorry for any misspellings or if anything get's cut off
Just Another Kid chapter 11 . 1/15/2015
Don't think like that your story is pretty good I'm excited for the next chapter I hope you'll get over it. You have great potential so please don't think like that. Anyways like I said earlier I'm pretty excited for the next chapter! I have strange feeling that L-2 is Lance. Not only that but not to be mean to Green, Misty Red and Yellow I really want to see more new characters that are good guys especially the people from the 13 warriors from before mainly Blue since all of us who read this know that Blue will probably be a Theif along with Silver (if he is in this story) so I really want to see if when they get to another town they go around and meet Blue who could do something like steal from somewhere in town and bumps into them or cons/almost cons them since Green's probably going to be around even after they leave Henesys and gets caught by them. I really hope the second one happens since I would really enjoy a reference from what happened in the manga from that.

P.S. Sorry for any misspellings or if anything gets cut off it happens a lot.
xxxDreamingflowerxxx chapter 11 . 1/5/2015
I also forget lots of things and hey exams are hell so no one blames you.

I find this chapter very satisfying and I'm serious. I like how the pase of it goes, Yellow planning to challenge Red because she wants to test her skills and Misty blaming her that it's because she's jealous and then battling Yellow in Red's place.

Then Charon suddenly appearing and making Red incapable for battling it was a very unique idea, laughing gas or whatever it is.

The end only seemed to be lacking something... yellow'\s wounds need to be tend, also Yellow meeting Charon again should have some bigger impact or maybe after her adrenaline goes down at least and Green should know what happened.

Also Red's decision, now that the town they had hopped to receive support from has also fallen, what will he do? Travel? look for a way to beat the enemy, find out what's happening to the world? Something like that is probably missing in the chapter. I had expected for Red to say what he would do after encouraging Misty to continue to protect her village.
Brownie guest chapter 1 . 11/4/2014
Oh my goodness... I want your lunchbox. Really bad. o.o' ... Just wanted to say that, your reviews seem to imply that this is a good story, so I'll have to read more. :) I sometimes read reviews before reading the story, to tell if it's deemed good by the general community. That, and I wanted to see if your sister reviewed your story and what she said. Figured it may be funny. Siblings technology weird humor. I should know, I have two awesome brothers. Who I like to joke around with. Used to hate one of them. Cuz he sat on me when I was little. He's matured though. No longer do we yell at eachother. Usually. :) *reads beginning* ok, one thing I suggest to make it easier to read, separate it into paragraphs. Looks less messy that way. *goes back to reading* great story so far! I seriously have no suggestions. Nice, keep it up! :) although, I don't know what you mean by maple story, so I'll have to look it up. I'll do that now, great story, again, keep it up!
anime64ever chapter 9 . 10/21/2014
This is really good! You potrayed the character's personality really well,and the plot's cool too. I like this weapon idea. Yeah, I know, you're prob like 'woah, ok, who's this random person?' I just found this fanfiction today, and read all the chapters. So, yeah...can't wait till your next update!
Yks chapter 1 . 8/24/2014
waaa! the cliffhanger won't make me sleep! need more! and thanks for makin this story sir.
Guest chapter 10 . 8/22/2014
update more boss hahaha this is way too addicting
TheFinalElements chapter 10 . 8/14/2014
Oh no, Yellow sounds like Green...

I love this story, and I hope you'll get to include the other characters soon.
piichivy chapter 10 . 8/11/2014
Hi! It's Fenn here! I finally decided to log in. I really like this chapter for some reason. Even though it has MangaPokeShipping, I really love the fact that Yellow became confident and determined! So yeah. Keep it up!
xxxDreamingflowerxxx chapter 10 . 8/11/2014
Yaay new chapter!

Don't worry your sis already told me that you guys have exams atm. But when it's over you can't relax more, right?

Good to see Yellow trying to reform herself so the can get stronger and that Green is nice enough to train her... Ten again he also trained her in the manga.

Wasn't it a bit too quick for Red and Misty to start a relationship? I mean they met only a few days ago. Poor Yellow, yes I'm a Special shipper, but you probably found out already, since I'm also a fan of your sis' stories.

So next chapter will cover a lot? I'm curious more character will appear then, what about Saque and the main villain, what's his plan? Why did he attack Red's village? I'm also curious about Yellow's past still, but that will probably explained later. And the most important question; When will Red notice his feelings for Yellow?!

I'm also very curious about the battle. For now Gorosuke looks like her strongest member.

Good luck on your tests!
Fenn chapter 9 . 7/7/2014
It was pretty expected to see Yellow suck in that battle. (I'm sorry Yellow.) I would like to see how she would overcome her past. (And see more teasing from other characters. XD) I can't wait to see others' pasts.

Fenn the Fennekin signing out!
xxxDreamingflowerxxx chapter 9 . 7/7/2014
Yaay a new chapter!

Nice to see yellow trying out a battle. Thought seeing how she sucks at it is also to be expected. That girl will probably have more moments where she has to struggle because of her past.

And as expected of Green to give Yellow such a half-assed tour. That poor girl had been sleeping in a lab for god who knows long, I wouldn't be surprised if she isn't familiar with some buildings and their functions, then again Green doesn't know that.

Looking forward for more. :D
Fenn chapter 8 . 7/1/2014
Ohhhhh...So Green's an archer. But yay! I'm happy to see an update! (I unfortunately, am very slow. XD) So...Green Oak, Professor Oak, and Misty (?) appear. Well, that's nice. Of course future allies fight before joining each other. Happens all the time. Well, most of the time. Keep up the great work!

Fenn the Fennekin signing out!
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