|Reviews for Darwin's Fist|
| Guest chapter 12 . 4/11
THIS...IS...F***...AMAZING! i speak for every one wheni say MOAR! *begins yeling at new DARWINS FIST recruts* "WELCOME TO BASIC TRAING, OR HELL, WHERE WE'RE GONNA MAKE YOU WISH YOU WISHYOU HADNT BEEN BORN,
| Zane Frost chapter 4 . 3/27
Artemis fowl II?
| Garibaldi the Black Haired chapter 12 . 3/11
wait. Is Hester Shaw a reference to Infernal Devices? That was a cool series.
I like your SPARTAN IIs, they do click for me (finaly.)
Keep up the good work.
| Clevingerrr chapter 12 . 3/10
I'm glad we got a proper backstory for the Fist. Those tense, emotional scenes make Marasco a more sympathetic character, and act as a nice foil to his more animalistic side in combat. Alek's reactions were interesting as well, especially with the question at the end.
At this point, I'm curious as to where the story will go. Now that they burned St. Petersburg and know about the mini-walkers, there seems to be no clear-cut objective for them. I get the feeling that we're building up to a confrontation between at least one member of Darwin's Fist (probably Marasco) and Deryn and Alek. The beating from the prior chapter and the pheromones moment seem to suggest that, or the possibility that one of the two will end up receiving an enhancement similar to the other members of the Fist. Or, I'm reading into it too much.
Spelling and grammar were greatly improved in this chapter, aside from a few minor errors.
| Clevingerrr chapter 11 . 2/21
Damn, that was a tense chapter. A rather welcome one, though! Great to finally get Alek's POV (spot-on, I should mention) regarding the Fist. Seeing the Clanker unit was a nice touch, considering America's role as both Clanker and Darwinist in the trilogy. Are you going to delve into potential discrimination against them, by chance? Judging by how xenophobic members like Marasco are, it'd be interesting to learn about how their comrades view them.
I loved the outburst between Marasco and Alek near the end. The two contrasted well, and definitely added to the appeal of the chapter. Honestly, I was half-expecting him to lay into Deryn as well once she mentioned the truth about Darwin's Fist, but maybe it was for the best that it never happened.
If I may be a picky reader, there are a lot of spelling mistakes and grammatical errors in this chapter. In addition, the spacing seems a bit off: it's sometimes difficult to tell when one section ends and another begins. Just a quick run-through Word or another document reader might help clarify the issue.
| Resisting the Borg chapter 10 . 2/15
Well, this has been largely interesting. I've counted two or five characters who seem to have magically appeared from other series. If this continues, might I request an appearance by the Mumby family?
Seriously, though. It's a fun series and I enjoy the concept, but your 'super-soldiers' seem to be a little… over-powered. Sure, they had trouble battling the robot in this chapter, but I recall reading somewhere that "if you have to invent kryptonite for your character, then they're way too powerful." Or words to that effect. You might want to tone it down a little. Also, do you have any idea about how the super-soldiers/Spartans would be affected by having animal DNA grafted to their own-the MENTAL effects. They could be increasingly feral, territorial, et cetera. Unless they have a brilliant therapist (or the boffins are just THAT GOOD, which I have a little trouble believing), they're probably going to act SLIGHTLY psychotic.
But really. You've already featured Hester Shaw from Mortal Engines, so why not the Mumbys?
| Clevingerrr chapter 1 . 2/12
It's nice to see a story shedding more light on the American aspect of Leviathan, especially given the relatively light focus on them during Goliath. The OC's are well-written and unique, and Deryn doesn't seem very different from her personality in the novels. I'll be sure to keep up-to-date with the story's progression.
My only gripe would be with the overall lack of Alek or any other characters from the series. The story has worked well with mostly Deryn so far, but Alek's perspective made up 1/2 of the content of the trilogy. It just seems a bit odd.
Aside from that, this is an excellent fanfiction.
| MissyBailey chapter 1 . 1/15
I usually wait till to end to review, but I just wanted you to know that this chapter has more fantastically placed references than I've ever seen. Thank you.
| DaLintyMan chapter 1 . 12/7/2013
Don't the books mention all of America was using both Clanker and Darwinist methods? It's been a while, but that's what I remember.
| Snickerdoodle Once Removed chapter 7 . 12/1/2013
Semper fidelis means "always loyal", not "always ready".
| Areias chapter 9 . 8/16/2013
Oh, wow, this is like, MONTHS late, but I suppose you must be talking about me here in the A/N - the comment about America's national power, right? Alas, I'm sorry for going anon; I was too lazy to log on. If you hadn't left a comment on my story and I hadn't clicked into your profile I would have forgotten I'd ever reviewed it! (Sorry, I'm terribly unorganized like that, which is why I've stopped responding and/or PMing and/or commenting recently)
Anyway, I see that you've chalked everything up to private developers, which I suppose can work. I certainly like the result; very exciting stuff. It speaks to the I CRAVE MASSIVE ACTION part of me, which isn't a bad thing at all.
Feel free to PM, and I shall try my best to respond and/or remember that I have already responded so I don't send you two responses by accident (this has happened to me a lot). Cheers.
| Guest chapter 9 . 7/4/2013
-A Random Reader
| Guest chapter 8 . 7/4/2013
I like the Hunger Games reference ;D
-A Random Reader
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/3/2013
To answer the question at the beginning: I just do t know much about firearms, but those names did seem like they belonged to more modern guns, with the M### thing and such. I was tempted to look it up, but I didn't want to stop reading this xD. Good job!
-A Random Reader
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/2/2013
Holy barking spiders. This is THE best fanfic I think I have ever read! *Q*
-A Random Reader (and a huge Scott Westerfekd fan)