|Reviews for That Voodoo That You Do|
| guest chapter 1 . 11/7/2017
Why should or would an intelligent and confident girl like Hermione wish to be someone else? WTF as a new motto, not sure how to say this, but it is not a frase intelligent people use, and whatever Hermione is, she sure is that.
I think, your story would do better in another fan-fic setting. Maybe something taking place in an american high school.
I know my words were not as kind, as they could be, however I think, it is brave of you to put your work out there for all of us to see. And remember practise make perfect!
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/17/2017
I didn't read most of the chapter, but I feel the need to point out that FB was launched in 2004. The war in 1999. There's no way Hermione would be on it and it's not like there can be a magical version because wizards are notoriously bad with technology. If you're going to write more HP fic please take the time to at least type into Google "when was [insert thing] invented" as the entirety of the series takes place in the 90s. I might have given your fic more off a chance if you had put at least that much effort into it.
| scabiorgirl chapter 6 . 8/28/2017
Oh ha hi... liked this chapter alot.
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/8/2017
Could hardly finish the first chapter. Seems like it would be a good story, but the writing feels like I'm reading a 13 year old's diary.
| ForsakenKalika chapter 1 . 2/22/2017
You were in high school when this was completed, weren't you? It's not bad, bot great, about the same quality as I was writing. Some continuity problems, like the fact that, in 1999, facebook wasn't a real thing yet. You would have wanted to use MySpace, Kiwibox, Bolt, or iTurf. The jargon is all off, which is, again, another timing issue. You've got mid-00's American slang in a late-90's British fic. The characterization seems a bit of self-insertion where Hermione is involved, and the plot is wacky and awkward.
I would love to see an edit of this, however, and would definitely give it another chance. If you need this Britpicked, I'd hop on one of the fb groups or ask someone in the community here.
| Elephant chapter 17 . 11/29/2016
I think that the story started out great but i just can not get over the fact that draco does literaly nothing to stop the mariage or to be with it wasnt for flori they wouldnt be together in the end.I thought that draco didnt deserve the happy it was just so i really like your writing work just not what I'm okey for mentally
| MoondustPrincess21 chapter 1 . 11/21/2016
I want you to know that I have come back to read this story about 10 times over the years, I love your writing. Don't worry about the negative reviews
| HubrisBrutus chapter 1 . 10/7/2016
Too much of America mentioned, this is a British Fanfic soooo where is the Britishness. Also no contractions, it makes the story stiff and unrealistic.
It really irked me that all the witches and wizards had laptops in the actual books it was mentioned that since Hogwarts is so old the magic there is to strong and ancient for muggle technology.
Characters are EXTREMELY shallow, one-dimensional, and just irritating.
Hermione comes off as a WHORE. NOT A BADASS, A HOE.
The whole emotion laspect of this story is off. I understand maybe she didn't care for Ron as much as she thought but to not even be pissed that he cheated in the first place instead of breaking it off.
Too many simple sentences.
I decided to add another review because I felt my other one was way to harsh. Especially since I did enjoy one of your other stories.
Truthfully the reason I was so harsh is I am tired of garbage Fanfic with weak characterization, unrealistic or self insert OC's, and shorty writing.
And I really really REALLY wonder about what people are reading, what EDUCATION they are receiving, WHERE their heads are at when they encourage horrible, terrible, writing. And you are not even close to being the worse but I sew these reviews on these weak stories bit not on the genuinely good ones. And I am lost.
Also I dislike when Americanisms are inserted into the Wizarding World.
Actually let me clarify, I thoroughly dislike when Americanisms are added that take away, distract from the story so SPECTACULARLY in a blvery bad way because they make Americans seem egotistical and overly proud.
Dont get me wrong I AM PROUD TO BE AN AMERICAN...sometimes...but to through it in so half-hazardly it makes me cringe inside for the other people from different countries reading this and thinking badly about us for it or reinforcing bad stereotypes. Especially those from the UK because it's there shine or something like that youre stealing. Idk if that's what they all feel. But I know it's how I would feel and how I do feel when the same thing happens with the black characters in the actual books being replace with white character. Like Blade or Dean. It makes me feel like DAMN THERE IS ONLY LIKE 3 MENTIONED BLACK CHARACTERS IN THE FUCKING BOOKS, SERIOUSLY.
I just feel skimped out like Taco Bell with their cheese.
-Hermione is way the fuck off.
-Draco is way the fuck off.
-All the parents in general are way the fuck off.
-The setting is the way the fuck off.
-No contractions, way off.
-Self insert execution way the fuck off.
-OC's way the fuck off.
-Hermione is a hoe way the fuck off.
-Hermione personality in the beginning way the fuck off.
-Hermione is just a slutty submissive way the the fuck off.
-Americanisms just plain irritating as shit.
-Dialogue...just why...just wtf...idu
-Plot...No contraceptives...no common sense amongst any of the characters.
I DO STAND BY MY POINT OF FEELING LESS INTELLIGENT THAT WHEN I STARTED TUE STORY.
| HubrisBrutus chapter 11 . 10/7/2016
Literally SKIPPED 4 CHAPTERS, skimmed the rest until this point, and just wondering why I even bothered to do that.
This story is SOOOO POINTLESS, TRITE, STUPID, PATHETIC.
I feel as if while reading it I was loosing IQ points.
A COMPLETE WASTE OF TIME.
DO NOT READ.
| Guest chapter 18 . 7/30/2016
Don't let any bad reviews put you down, I just finished your story and it was so entertaining, so much fun, and I loved how Dramione was portrayed in it. Thank you for the great reading. Xx
| Tilty.bbb chapter 18 . 7/19/2016
This was a great read well done
| nathaniel chapter 1 . 6/21/2016
"what the fuck" really couldnt think f something else
| PhoenixGravity chapter 3 . 5/15/2016
So I've really been enjoying this so far- the only "problem" is the writing. I think it's because you use lots of short and simple sentences, it doesn't flow very easily sometimes. Though I'm not sure I would be able to do better, just trying to help! Looking forward to reading the rest
| fabian chapter 7 . 11/8/2015
| fabian chapter 4 . 11/8/2015
I LOVE this fanfic it is bomb( really great) i love how hermione is a strong independant women and Natile i LOVE her too finally there is a person in these fanfics that is not a boy that are independent and a boss ass bitch but i think all this stuff with hermione and lenny should stop thats borderline porn please stop that and is the love of hermiones life draco because that would make this story even better over all this story was bomb