Reviews for Three Seconds
Lala-shrimp chapter 8 . 8/3/2014
Kyaaaaa d'awww, Saber so tsun!

Also it's Caster not Castor.
Lala-shrimp chapter 6 . 8/3/2014
Ok, I finished this chapter and I'm not mad any more. Good job! Sorry about before!
Lala-shrimp chapter 5 . 8/3/2014
IT IS IMPOSSIBLE FOR ANY ONE EXCEPT FOR SABER TO USE EXCALIBUR. WHY? BECAUSE ONLY SHE HAS ENOUGH PRANA. ARCHER CAN TRY TO TRACE EXCALIBUR BUT IT IS NOT POSSIBLE FOR HIM TO TRACE IT AT IT'S FULL POWER. THIS FIC WAS REALLY GOOD BUT MAKING ARCHER USE EXCALIBUR IS BLASPHEMY. GOOD BYE. CORRECTION:BAD BYE.
Uraharaisgod chapter 4 . 11/7/2013
...what? Archer really snapped that badly? Your pushing the limits of believability, especially since in canon Ilya was the ONLY person he could never bring himself to kill, its intrinsically implied Ilya was a heavy part of Archer's life.

Hell, he left Rin in a position to be raped by Shinji in UBW, he's more attached to his sister than Rin, if Lancer hadn't joined up with Shirou, Rin would have been dead with Archer not giving a sht...

I just can't see Archer being capable of this, even if he went insane he wouldn't stoop to that level. I'd sooner see him *save* her after Berserkers demise, then subvert her mentally into accepting him as her new Servant, and helping him torture Shirou to insanity (She'd be more than happy to help, especially since at this point in time she never saw any of Shirou's redeeming features, she just desires to kill him).

Surely it would doubly kill Shirou to have his own sister be part of murdering everything he valued? Of knowing just what a magnificent bastard Archer was in doing that? Just killing her before Shirou even knows who or what she is purely for Prana...kinda seems a massive waste...
antitsundereblackjackofnerdifa chapter 8 . 10/17/2013
Please continue on!
coronadomontes chapter 8 . 6/5/2013
un fanfic impresionante ojala haya mas capĂ­tulos
Mage of Hope chapter 8 . 3/25/2013
Can't wait for next chapter!
Guest chapter 1 . 2/21/2013
The prologue was very good...the rest...not as good as I would have liked.
Guest chapter 8 . 10/29/2012
fascinating. I look forward to MOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRR RRRRRR
chronodekar chapter 3 . 9/15/2012
I feel that you are rushing events here. Could be just me though.

-chronodekar
chronodekar chapter 2 . 9/15/2012
... And now you've disappointed me. WHY have these silly dream sequences in the first place? Sure, they boost Shirou's basic stats, but I don't think "fit" into the story at this time.

-chronodekar
chronodekar chapter 1 . 9/15/2012
THIS is SOME introduction !

WOW. You've got my attention.

-chronodekar
daniel-gudman chapter 4 . 9/15/2012
You don't need to make Archer more powerful than than canon, IMO.

Other things...
Well, the Yakuza family in Fuyuki City, is the "Fujimura" clan. The boss, is Taiga's grandfather; who is acting as the caretaker for the Emiya estate until his dead friend's adopted son comes of age.

Grammar...
There are some periods missing from the ends of sentences, particularly after someone speaks. There are some run-on clauses that need commas. And it's better usage to start a new paragraph whenever someone says something "new", even if the last person to speak was the same person.

Well, it's kinda roughly written, but in the end, it's got the most important thing: it's interesting.
NIX'S WARDEN chapter 8 . 9/15/2012
DAMN MAN DAMN JUST...NICE STORY
Ashe chapter 8 . 9/14/2012
Marry Me
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