Reviews for The Next Great Adventure |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I LOVE IT! ADD MORE PLEASE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nope |
![]() ![]() This is so fucking stupid, but unlike many I will explain why that is so you can one day get off your ass and possibly fix it. 1) You have the very lazy and outright bad writing plot of having randomly omnipotent and mysterious being make huge effects on the story itself then... Nothing. Are you going to use them again? Who are they? Why did they do what they did? Why remove traumatic memories if he is going to a war torn world where he will need them? 2) Harry can transform and magically Kakashi and Gai, with NP showing why instantly understsnd. How? They do not have such in their world, the closest are the Inuzuku but they need their partners. 3) They take someone they believe is at most four years old to be interrogated by someone who looks monstrous. Really? Wtf are the expecting to find? Kakashi was genin at six and he was a monster. What do the expect to find and why say it in front of such a going child other than to terrify him on top of causing feelings of untrust? That is not how to ingrate a child to yourself or your village let alone when you think they have a special ability that can be cultivated to help out long term. You... You do not understand the mind at all so either you yourself are a child or never dealt with children to get it. In any case those three major mess ups within the first two chapters is why I am leaving at this point as it only paints a rather horrific painting of things to come. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hate to inform you, dear Harry, but even if you were your original age and everything went well and you befriended Kakashi and the others, they'll still find you cute and ruffle your fluffy hair. On that note, this is probably the billionth-ish time I've read this, but you've made a lot of strange hints about Sasuke, what he thought of Hari-chan, and Harry's reaction to several events along the fic that just made the slash fan in me think that there might be something brewing that Harry is oblivious to (and will cause him a lot of trouble because of the perceived age difference), and believe me, it didn't occur to me except maybe a couple of times ago (or maybe more but I didn't catch what my brain connected), and I'm not sure what I feel about the relationship, but I was wondering if it is real, and I'm pretty sure if you did I'll like it anyway since you write so well I'll have no other choice. I just really, really want more Hari-chan & Kakashi interactions. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm not sure why, but I see Hari-chan going on a long mission alone, being in the hospital for really urgent medical situation, or just, you know, getting kidnapped or something and Shishou not allowed to help because he's emotionally compromised, And just, Kakashi walking in a semi numb state to Harry's room, sees his wolf plushie, and then as if summoned goes to the wardrobe and sees a strange fabric, the Toga he first he saw his ward in, looking so tiny and vulnerable, unable to even talk and stumbling every other step, and being so scared he was shaking, and Kakashi just hugs the fabric close to his chest and buries his face in it, and maybe not cry, but break, and just, he wants his son back so much, and if he hadn't yet confessed that Hari-chan is his son, this would be perfect! |
![]() ![]() ![]() and harry transformed into a bet instead of a wolf |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope, that there will be new chapters. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It was cool. |
![]() ![]() ![]() that is good. update soon please. looking forward to the rest of the story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wah this is sooooo good plz plz continue |
![]() ![]() ![]() I had forgotten this story. it is really engaging |
![]() ![]() Update please...! Please author-san...! |
![]() ![]() Wow, what a reward! Handed over to murdering torturing psychopaths to be used as cannon fodder. |
![]() ![]() ![]() There is also the fact that he can’t immediately speak the language. He can shapeshift his entire body but the Fates can’t instantly give him access to a language? My suspension of disbelief was shot to hell by this scene. The Hokage knowing about his arrival? Shot, I tell you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Right away, there are a lot of weird inconsistencies. Why didn’t he just kill himself right off the bat if he wanted to die? Why didn’t the Fates set him up with a family to even make a pass at giving him a better life? His situation at the Dursleys was probably better than Konoha at his current age. |