U know in ch 3 you keep writing the word trust when you mean to write thrust.

"...my jizz was joining the flood" you know that is so wrong in so many levels, in a typical gamer that is. I found myself imagining that Naruto came in front of a horde of green(?)ish tentacled parasitic alien-that was hellbent on destroying any sentient life-while the Flood actually opened their mouths to take the semen...IT WAS SO HORRIBLE! OH GOD HELP ME NOT TO BE TRAUMATIZED!

update this soon, its a good story

Um, bro? Is this story even ABOUT the vixens, anymore?

this is a fun opertuinity for ya XD if u have tazuna message the hokage and tell him what happened it would contredict what kakashi would say lol or u could have kakashi be a dick with kuranai and then naruto dispproves both of em cause how u made em either naruto and shino need a new team or both jounin need to be demoted lol so much fun opertunity there! abuse it... make a huge arguement trash talking! galor! also wouldnt it be funny as shit if kurohime was half black widow... u said they was extinct but she is only half... then u can fuck with shino sence shino would be scared of spiders due to natural predator lol just a fun thought! ps u have forggoten about the vixens and focused alot on shino... mabe time to give them some spotlight!

3 and1 only for the sex and if your lust isbad I have surprised mine for 5 years I am 18 and still now sex hard but if my lust took a form this town would be fucked 9 times over littaruly but u should write some more chapters

mommy daddy
lust fuck emo if u mommy 2 both she fuck her bro u sick basterd

I love the bros of doom but my family is 1000 time scaryer then that

fantastic story please continue

Your Author notes are almost as entertaining as you story.

you know, I've read your other stories...and I still love them all.

This one in particular has such a great story and im only at chapter 6 :)

mwahahahahahaha the third got his karma thanks man

Konsu: Mmmmmmmm Blood and sex, sounds fun.
Sobek: Damn you, Konsu I hate how you shove your tits on anyone. Sorry bout that she's a bitch sometimes-
Konsu: Hey!
Sobek: Anywho love the story's proggression from somewhat dumb to an actuall story and I cant wait for more.
Konsu: I can give you more.
( fight breaks out )
Saures: Great, so yeah story is good and all that, Im gonna take a nap.
: How do you deal with your guys? Serously tell me these guys are so annoying. well good job buddy.

LOVE THIS STORY IGNORE HATTERS. HATERS GONNNA HATE

Well, since I beyond despise this style, making it Naruto talking to the audience, I couldn't get beyond the first few sentences. Sorry.