Absolutely fantastic!
I’ve always loved this story and time and time, year after year, I’ve diligently returned to it

The use of the outsider POV is just perfect. Though I’ve always interpreted Anakins behavior as being all from his experience as a slave, rather than her thoughts of being from the jedi. I find it makes the story a lot more enjoyable

Since she knows Anakins name— and clearly remembers it, because presumably she’s recounting the full story years later; I wonder what her reaction would be to the clone wars. Seeing Anakin Skywalkers name plastered on the holonet alongside a suspiciously familiar face. I imagine she wouldn’t connect the dots until years later, when she’s telling the story to someone and they connect the dots for her

This is such a beautiful story. I am sucker for stories about little Anakin, most of the authors just portray him as an arrogant and selfish person which is not entirely true.
I loved how you phrased the story, the OC's point of view was wonderful.

Какая милота! Просто прелесть. Мелкий Энакин мил необычайно ;)

This is cute! I love young Anakin Skywalker, there's just something so painfully earnest and adorable about him, that I thought you managed to capture quite well in this story.

Beautifully written! This piece of fiction made me smile in adoration, I truly love it.

How I love the third party point of view in this story! I tend to like it in all kinds of narratives: it's like a medieval stained glass window where we watch a character through the eyes of different observers and the image we get is necessarily fragmented but so, so complex and interesting.
I'm charmed your writing style. The voice of the narrator is perfect, she (?) is so real to me like I were there, in her shop, watching the cake being watched by Anakin. Little Anakin repairing the chime, the details of normal Coruscant life, the atmosphere changing along with the weather and the arrival of Obi-Wan, the pressure building up to the point of being almost unbearable; the loneliness of the two Jedi and their possible togetherness watched by another character: I love every sentence of it.
Is the narrator a mouthpiece of the reader? She is her own perfect character, I know, but at the same time I, one of the readers, am her, watching them, helping them in my own way.
I have read this vignette three times and every time I love it more.
Would you mind if I translated the story into Polish, for my daughter and a friend who does not read in English? It would be an honor :) If possible, I would publish it on and later on ao3, giving you credit. I would like to share the emotions the story gave me with others who are not able to read in English.
By the way, is the title a reference to the weather, to the storm on Coruscant? In Polish we have two expressions that could be used here, and one of them is a simile: “like a lightning striking from a clear sky”, which I find appropriate, but at the same time a bit stronger than your title’s connotation.

Absolutely wonderful. I loved your characterization of Anakin and Obi-Wan, and your OC was amazingly well developed. I love POVs that look at characters and situations we know from the outside. Terrific job!

A very touching peek at young Padawan Anakin.

Perfect. I love how, even though the story opens with someone who isn't Star Wars, or even recognizable, you still like her within a few paragraphs. And you manage to tell the whole story, exactly how it is, through an objective third person. Keep it up!

Beautiful. Such a treat of a story. Thank you

This was lovely and sweet, but not too sweet, at least as far as the prose wrapping goes. Has also left me with a sudden and irrepressible urge to seek out some cake!

Awww. Beautiful little fic about an uncertain Anakin.

awwww! So sweet. :) Love it...great from the "outsider's" perspective, too. :)

I love looking at our heroes through the eyes of other people and so I loved this story! Tge woman's observations were spot on, I liked especially her being a bit freaked out by Anakin reading her mind and then by Obi-Wan's sudden appearance and also how her opinion of the latter changed when she saw how he looks at Anakin. A bit sad but lovely. And Anakin was actually cute in this so I liked it as well :)

Firstly I loved this Story!
The way you described young Anakin was simply amazing he is confused with his new way of life and wants his master to understand!

Obi wan is just so irresistible the way you write him!

Both girls likely would have swooned on the spot – as humans go, this particular young fellow was an absolute masterpiece. His tousled hair was damp with rain, like his cloak, and he bored into the poor boy with eyes like burning blue coals. I quite literally shrank back in my chair – the room seemed far, far too small to contain the newcomer, and the air felt charged with an electricity that no rainstorm could possibly explain.

Hehe that's the obi wan I know to cool for school!

And indeed he was thrust into the role of a parent too early!
Your talents have made me a believer I'm not sure in what but the belief is their lol!

Never stop writing I have a bag of glow moths I am not afraid to drown em:p

Time2 reads friend: She really will , nod nod
Obi wan: Mercy is the jedi way ruth for the sake of the glow moths that are used to commemorate the passing jedi
Time 2 read: Mwahahahaha