Reviews for Together
musichettta chapter 1 . 7/1/2014
Very poetic.
Gorgeous, really
iridescent bookyworm chapter 1 . 5/14/2012
This reminded me of a song from this play called Gyspy called Roses Turn...This is like the Harry Potter version of it and Iloveit!

I had a dream June

It wasn't for me June

And of it wasn't for me, just where would you be, Miss Gypsy Rose Lee?

Mkay I'll shut up now
she was the book thief chapter 1 . 1/5/2012
I love it! I love your formatting very much.

I especially love this:

(rational thought has just gone



and the end the most. I love your poetry. :)

reading this to see what Eliza is like so I can write you a Louis/Eliza story. ;)
felines chapter 1 . 12/23/2011
I really enjoy your freeverses, Rae!

They're so delightful in terms of their formatting, and I also love this Eliza OC! I really do. You should definitely do a full-blown oneshot of LouisEliza!

And of course I loved the RoseScor. :)

Good job! Keep writing!
shimmeringbubbles chapter 1 . 11/29/2011
interesting... hm... I like this, but it's not my favourite of your stories. It works, though.
kingslayers chapter 1 . 11/28/2011
Wow, Rae. This was actually such a fantastic freeverse. I really liked it, and I liked how the two couples got each other together.

I also really liked the links between the characters, especially how Liza and Rose were comfortable enough (close friends?) to discuss love lives together and it was just awesome.

Really stellar job, babe!

Okay. Points.

It's a freeverse, so the points are a bit oddly given, but it should all add up.

Instead of grammar, I'm doing formatting for 5 points.


FORMATTING: 4.5/5 points {some of the best formatting I've ever seen, generally well-done overall}

SPELLING: 5/5 points {I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, so.}

POV: 4/5 {I loved Louis' personal voice, the only thing stopping you from 5/5 was the fact that it was mainly Louis/OC but it was totally enjoyable and I loved all parts!}

CHARACTER: 4/5 {You wrote this from Louis' POV, so that helped- I think to get a 5, you'd need to have him as an instrumental character in getting them together}

ORIGINALITY: 8.5/10 {Pretty original, and I've never read a freeverse like it, but the blind!love thing has been overused a bit- however, you wrote it incredibly well and made it seem almost new, thus your high marks}

TOTAL: 26/30

I'll add them onto your sheet, Rae!

Thanks for participating in the sing it for the world challenge!
sydneysages chapter 1 . 11/6/2011
Oh sweetie, this was amazing!

One of the best freeverses I've ever read.

Perfect emotions and utterly just perfect...i love how you wrote it & what you did - just utterly AMAZING!

/loves you

overstreets chapter 1 . 11/4/2011
This was great, though I think you should have spent more attention on scorrose ;)