|Reviews for The Rain of Spain is Falling on Her Neck|
| Jael73 chapter 1 . 11/7/2012
Hmm...I feel like you have a story here that doesn't have to end with Eliza's death. We all know Freddy would have left her if she would have married him, so what about her needing to accept that there's only one man that loves her?
| BBC Addict chapter 1 . 10/9/2012
If only they both weren't so proud and stubborn...
| liesallies chapter 1 . 11/3/2011
A very nice piece, I liked it. You are very good at using the first person to bring out the emotion of the story. I think you could further strengthen the piece by allowing for certain ambiguities. By cutting out the simile of Eliza's life to the candle, you would actually strengthen that connection. It might more potent to let that comparison to remain a unspoken metaphor, rather than a direct simile.
Similarly, by removing the last two sentences of sixth paragraph, where Eliza mentions her own death, you can increase the dramatic suspension and heighten the emotional response of the audience even further. Overall though, I thought you ended the piece very well. I very much enjoyed it.