Reviews for Ai Youkai
Phoenix774 chapter 31 . 8/22
love both new updates for this story and Youkaigakure. I have a feeling about what Sakura's Gift is but I will let you reveal it in your own time. Who knows I might be wrong about it. The onky thing i have to complain about is what happened to Haku at the end of the chapter in Youkaigakure. Well with that said, hope to see you with more updates in the near future.
Animaman chapter 31 . 8/22
Well, not too bad, although during the time between updates, would be nice if the chapters were a bit longer. Also, would be nice to at least see an update of what's going on in Konoha, like thanks to the Civilian Council, they ended up losing some valuable allies, or say, Jiraiya ends up finding some stuff on them that shows how many bluffs they got away with whenever they threatened Hiruzen. Anyway, think Ayame is past due for an appearance, and amazing how she hasn't fallen for Naruto by now.
TigrezzTail chapter 31 . 8/22
Hm, unless Sakura only harnessed something that already lay dormant in Ino...
VFSNAKE chapter 31 . 8/22
Awesome! Makes you wonder what else Sakuras power can do.
pfcvillanueva chapter 31 . 8/22
hmm intriguing and welcome back. had to reread a few chapters to figure out what was going on
gamelover41592 chapter 31 . 8/22
Awesome work on this chapter and man we have mystery now and it looks like war has begun
soggy noodle chapter 3 . 7/18
Look... this is cheesy and kind of stupid; the kunai-to-the-back-of-the-neck silencing move is an instantaneous death. It is a penetrating strike that severs the brain stem. There would be NO time for Moegi's mother to give last words or wishes as she would be INSTANTLY dead.

You cannot live with a destroyed/severed brainstem. End of story.

Tsunade just declaring all these rogue element ANBU to be 'fired' is equally ridiculous. She should declare them immediately to be what their actions depict - traitors, and as such, to be immediately executed with prejudice.

There is too much talking and grandstanding like some sort of aimed-at-children Saturday morning cartoon level of villainy for the subject matter at hand here.


Look, the idea of Naruto being an incubus is an interesting idea if approached properly but there seems to be a bit too much rushing here, what with Naruto and Hinata apparently already being an item and Sakura dropping her infatuation with Suckskay as if she were snuffing a burning match between thumb and forefinger.

Taking time to develop these alterations rather than just springing them makes them far more believable and gets your readers more invested than sudden leaps like this.

All that said, I will continue to read this as I've read and liked others of your work and have seen you are a capable writer in your most recent pieces.
soggy noodle chapter 1 . 7/18
The pacing in this is really rapid. Almost jarringly so.

Sakura suddenly wanting to worship the ground that Saucegay walks on?

Hinata just suddenly having the courage to make any sort of play on Naruto? Even if uncouncous, in front of others?

Kushina -somehow- being alive and Naruto just taking her word for it without any lingering resentment for being alone for all his life (in the family sense)?

These are things that should be given more context and time to develop before springing it on your readers, otherwise it really stretches the suspension of disbelief too far.
KanikaOfTheRose chapter 30 . 7/4
I like this story too, I think Sakura got pregnant to early for the plot line but I can see the merit in the timing. I'm hoping you finish this story too.
Dracoessa chapter 4 . 6/18
Oh phaqer.
BigJohn Uzumaki36 chapter 30 . 5/28
When will you be updating this is a really good story. Plus I'm curious to see if Ino will be accepted into the harem.
HurZysn chapter 30 . 5/1
Interesting concept wish it was continued
Dragonjek chapter 30 . 4/23
Is Kushina insane? She's willing to make an enemy out of an entire nation-and an entire SPECIES-over something that could be resolved just by having Naruto sleep with a few women each Frenzy? To be honest, that's the most moral thing for him to do anyways.

The succubi are going to disappear. There's only one incubus left, and the rate of succubi appearing when reproducing with non-succubi is horribly low. For their species to even survive, they'd need succubi to try to have children every single year, just to hope that one of them eventually has the succubus gene.

Without action, the succubi will die off. Naruto is vital to their survival as a species. No one has a right to be calling out the succubi royalty for selfishness when the Konohans' are placing the love of three people (at the moment), who could still have a relationship with each other for the entire rest of the year, over the survival of an entire race of people.

Yeah, Rika and the other girls didn't know anything about Naruto and were just trying to use him. But what were they using him for? They didn't just want the sex' they admitted that they were entering their Frenzies. Those are all potential mothers trying to reach the only living being in existence guaranteed to let their succubus genes pass on.

No, it isn't nice. But it's entirely sympathetic, especially considering how bizarre the idea of an incubus trying to keep it in his pants would be to a society that depends so heavily on them screwing everyone.
Dragonjek chapter 29 . 4/23
Neither Naruto or Sakura aren't acting nearly as wildly as descriptions of the Frenzy made it sound like they would. Are they really in their Frenzies? Were two lovers really all it needed to keep him sedated?
Dragonjek chapter 28 . 4/23
This all really isn't fair to Zara.

Any ruler must put the needs of the whole before the wants-or even the needs-of the individual. Whether to protect royalty or to bring a powerful warrior back to the nation, taking their princess back was the best option. And in the middle of a war with the survival of the entire species at risk, going back for one child would be a fool's waste of resources (and a terrible danger to the species if he actually was an incubus. At least outside of Alfheim he'd be safe from their war).

She made unpleasant decisions, but they were for the betterment of her nation and her people.
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