|Reviews for True Despair|
| SayoShihoinXKohAyamerei chapter 13 . 8/19/2013
| grimmich chapter 13 . 3/18/2013
kikyo is like a shark in the water, out for blood :frown:
| Chaos-Guard chapter 13 . 12/22/2012
This whole story is really good I hope you update soon
| Guest chapter 13 . 11/26/2012
| Guest chapter 7 . 11/19/2012
You are a truly great writer!
| Guest chapter 6 . 11/19/2012
write more your a natral!
| Guest chapter 4 . 11/19/2012
this is amazing!
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/18/2012
| Guest chapter 13 . 10/21/2012
Please make a new chapter.
| Krissii-xx chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
I like it so far! :)
| Kyoya kumo chapter 13 . 10/8/2012
Add moreeeeee pleaseeeeeeeee
| Meech Macko chapter 13 . 10/6/2012
Ichigo is clearly more skilled and powerful than Inuyasha in his soul reaper form...or Shinigami...
and please ...no Kikiyo bashing...its childish and immature, she has a reason for her frustrations ...I mean c'mon she was bought back fro the dead and whose fault is it?
You do realize she was the first one to love Inuyasha and to wanting him to be a Human coz Kikiyo knew he would outlive her...
Bashing ruins the fic.
| blackrose177 chapter 4 . 9/25/2012
Nice chapter like the story so far keep up the good work
| Mrs Ann chapter 9 . 9/16/2012
It's seems a bit unprofessional. You sort of just pull your characters around, with little thought to the plot, or the scenes you create. You even put windows in a hut after taking the time to specify that it did NOT have windows.
My advice to you would to be to write each chapter 3-4 times, without looking at what you wrote previously. This will give you a good idea of what you want.
Or, if you want simpler. Every 1-3 paragraphs, stop and read what you wrote. This will help you catch simple errors. Also, keep a sticky note or scratch paper, and write the scene down, like;
'Hut: Insert description.
Character: Insert visual description'
When the appearance changes, write it down, this will help you keep things straight.
Also, write more often, the re-writing above would help a lot. The more often you write, the more often you catch common mistakes you make, and more you catch them, the better you get at avoiding making them.
You could even write short one shots or just sit down and write out the descriptions of your room. Then look through it, and try to separate the Important details, from the unimportant ones. This will also help you.
It'll take a while to get to where you want, but you're starting out good. You have great ideas and a good strong mind, but you'll need to work on it.
Another thing, while I'm at it. Something that helps me when I write is writing down different plot lines, but only 'big' things, or 'ending points' that leave you plenty of room to be creative with how you get there.
Keep your characters in character, and at all costs AVOID just doing something to cause drama or make your story interesting, it'll hurt you in the long run, and I see a lot of it in this fic. Look back at the wiki, watch a few episodes of fights so you can look at you character's fighting styles, and accurately decide what tactics of the enemy would and wouldn't work.
Try to break out of the 'I could do this, or I could do that' thought process, and practice thinking 'how would the character react is this happened, and is it plausible? Who could pull it off, and how do I get them there?'
I wish you luck with your future fics, and hoped this helped. I look forward to your work in the near future, and I can't wait to see how much you grow in your writing.
| devilboy101 chapter 13 . 6/17/2012
hurry up want to read story as fast as possiple please.