|Reviews for Unexpected Turns Of Events|
| Lzay-Niight chapter 1 . 11/17/2013
This story can be summed up in one word: Repetitve. By the time i got half way through it, i was damn tired of reading the words: cute, obvious, innocent, and any other that followed that path.
Decent plot, but cut the story in half. Save people some time.
| AokySvelginger chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
Great story! XD
| The Sandman's Daughter chapter 1 . 9/10/2013
This story has helped me FINALLY complete my pairings:
:) I was stuck in a threeway tie for her heart before, but now I'm sure! Thank you! :)
| Kaila chapter 1 . 8/15/2013
I thought this was really sweet. I was starting to get sad thinking that they weren't going to end up together, but now I'm really happy. I think you wrote this very well and I enjoyed it so... Thank You.
| suetoku89 chapter 1 . 7/5/2013
oh nonono you did wonderful \(ôωô)/ you should be proud of yourself remember "we are strish for ever" lol (êшê)
| Rei chapter 1 . 6/9/2013
WHAAAAT? IT WAS AMAZING, I KIND OF GOT A LADY BONER */*
| Alexandria chapter 1 . 6/1/2013
I-I don't even know how to describe how much I loved this...the plot, the drama, the characters, the sex-scene...everything was just so...so /amazing/. I was so intrigued by your story, and to be honest, I have no idea why. Normally, simple drama like one guy having internal conflict with himself about his best guy friend and his girlfriend normally bores me to death because of how predictable it is...but, with /this/...I just couldn't stop reading. No matter how hard I tried.
So what in the world are you talking about?! This story was fantastic, it was no where near crap! And this is coming from a picky reader! Don't put yourself down like you did when this story was amazing. Absolutely amazing. :D
| himikomitsarugii chapter 1 . 5/28/2013
I liked it!
| UchihaxHozuki chapter 1 . 4/15/2013
This was so unbelievably adorable w
| Hailee chapter 1 . 4/1/2013
I loved reading it. good work
| Kurokocchi3 chapter 1 . 3/19/2013
OMG KYAA 33
That was awsome !
I have to tell you, im late for school right now XD because i couldnt stop reading *-*
I love these two, they're such a cute cupple :3 what im writing
*agjhwjvsjhfwmagzhskagdhsjcsj xudkyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahot cutewoooow
| Tarsina18 chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
I didn't find it to be bad, your writing is much easier to read than most writers. Your story is well put, and it held my interest from start to finish, and took me 20 minutes to read it.
| MaybeSomeday chapter 1 . 11/28/2012
Dont be so hard on yourself. This was amazing and descriptive and i almost cried when Tokiya and Otoya 'broke up'
It was just soo... WOW... It was AMAZING! FANTASTIC... i LOVED IT :D
| HikaruWinter chapter 1 . 11/22/2012
...it's not a failure. I can assure you that I've seen worse, A LOT worse than your smut. It was decent, actually. Not the kind that has us fangirls shouting 'HOTFUCKYEAHMYGODWHEEE!' but good enough for a 'WHEE', that is better than average, believe it or not. So don't worry. You've got plenty of time to improve, and the plot was really sweet as well as angsty -a plus in my books-.
I've always liked this pairing -why the game the series is based on was made into an Otome instead of a Yaoi game (with all the possibilities...), I'll never understand. But the fandom has enough material to nosebleed all over, so, all is good in the world.
I cannot impartially judge their characterization, as I've only watched a couple of chapters (Me:Damn you, internet! Internet: MWAHAHAHAA) and the fanfictions I've read until now portray them with a couple of key differences I'm not sure belong or not to the cannon. For that, I apologize.
Only thing left to say is that there's a couple of grammar errors here and there. They were verbs in the wrong form, if I'm not mistaken -two of them should have been in the participle, of those I'm sure-. Take a look for me, okay? Being my third language, I pick up on these things easily, but I don't have a lot of time -nor a nice inernet *growls*- to point all of them. Don't misunderstand, though! They were six at most, and, in a Oneshot of such lenght, the errors are legit. I'm only asking because less experienced readers who have english as a second or thind -or even fourth- language could get confused as to what the phrases could mean. If you don't have time, I understand. It's not anything punishable with death or something...
Good job. This one goes to favourites... and please, don't kill me. I don't mean in any way, shape or form, to be rude. I only want to help *trembles*- has already been shouted at for constructive criticism
Please, forgive any and all of my gramatical failures, as English is, as I've already told you,my third language. I'm still learning. Have a nice day!
| Sade chapter 1 . 10/30/2012
it isnt crap D: its great! honestly one of the best stories I have read. and the smut was fine :3