|Reviews for Look Underneath|
| apenny12 chapter 1 . 11/10/2011
It's already great! You've given me enough vague details to put my curiosity on overload! Just from the first chapter, I can tell this story is very promising and will not disappoint readers! Can't wait for the next chapter!
| sasukes chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
This... Is going to be beautiful. I just know it.
| MidnightRain6593 chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
I'm definitely liking this so far and look forward to seeing where it'll go! :)
| faintinggoats chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Nyaaaaaaa you're writing a chapter fic? HOW EXCITED AM I! Looking forward to every update!
| TheUn-POP-ableBubble chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Very cool! I'm so interested to read more of what you've got planned for this. You've managed to set up some great tension and problems (Sasuke Sakura avoiding each other, Naruto being ever hopeful, Sasuke's life beginning to blur, etc). You've got it set to go in so many different directions, I don't know what's gonna happen next - and I wanna know! So have no fear; your palms aren't the only ones sweating. :)
I know that you'll be fine and make this great!
| ino8 chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
This is a great start to the story. I hope the next chapters are just as good. Update soon!
| golden doe chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Wow, more angst between Sasuke and Sakura. But as they say the more you hate the more you love.
Anyway, I like the conflict. It's still the Land of Iron murder attempt. Heh. It's very characteristic of Sakura to feel guilty about that and hide from him.
Though what I loved the most in this fic was Sasuke's reason for returning :) It was quite sweet.
Btw, I'm pleased to see this fic of yours. I loved your one shots :)
| Beeeee chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Ahhhhhhhhhh my gaaaaaaaaaaaaaad
Im so happy youre writing again! I havent heard anything from you in so so so so long! / You changed your name! Which was confusing.
But yeah, i love this and its only the first chapter! I adore your writing style as you may remember and wish i could write like that
| Ekun-Asha chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
You're not one to disappoint on purpose.
Let's see how well your characters can play "dodgeball".
A whetter of appetite your are. ;D
| Kaze and Kiba chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Hey, what the heck do you mean, your palms are sweating? It was super-so descriptive, it really painted a picture in my head. Can you make Sasuke take a shower in every chapter?
Did you rewrite the whole first chapter? Or add a chapter on the front? I thought it was great before, too. Hehee, you did awesome here, SU, I'm still dying to see the rest and you KNOW it, lol.
Thanks for the story,
| jellybeansinabottle chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Refreshing story! Awaiting to read more and more!
| LovexxxSakuraUchiha chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Great start! I'm hooked-I can't wait to see what happens next between Sasuke and Sakura xD
| The Scarlett Ribbon chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
OH MY GOD! IT'S HERE! IT'S HERE AND I CAN FINALLY STOP GOING INSANE WAITING TO FIND OUT WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN AFTER CHAPTER TWO.
I actually love you right now. Can you tell?
Heehee, okay time to be serious (I'm still squealing. Cannot be helped). I love this C! I love your use of language and imagery; "The last rays of the setting sun were slipping below the horizon " and "swirling curls of steam", to name a few - oh you make me so jealous with your writing! I love the sly, subtle humour that lingers between the lines - in Sakura's interaction with Ino, Shizune and Tsunade, with Naruto and Sasuke being competitive as usual. The characterisation is spot on! All of them behave exactly as I imagine - the dialogue is so naturally and effortlessly done!
And your Sasuke...CAN I JUST MARRY HIM PLEASE? I have a fatal weakness for tortured souls and my gosh - there are a whole bucket load of issues here. I love how he and Sakura are so similar here, while being so very out of sync - they both hold themselves accountable for what happened in the Land of Iron. They each feel like they have betrayed the other one and destroyed their bond with their own actions. There is so much misunderstanding and shouldering of blame here! I just want them to talk and straighten things out! So deliciously frustrating, C! This is perfect. Perfect. And I do not know how much longer I can stay coherent.
WHEN ARE YOU UPDATING? This is going to drive me mad, knowing it's all written out already. You want to send me chapter 3 yes? I WILL STILL LOYALLY REVIEW EVERY CHAPTER WHEN YOU POST THEM I PROMISE.
Just kidding. Sort of.
Adding to favourites because I love you and the story and I am just so happy to see that now everyone else can get an opportunity to read it too.
Oh. MUST CATCH UP WITH THOUGHTS ON THE MANGA. YES.
| ani.tenshi chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
The first chapter is wonderful! I am literally falling in love with this story - mostly because of how you portrayed Sasuke and Sakura.
The way you portray their feelings is just wonderful! I am more than amazed. I like the fact that you are equally paying attention to them both and your way of establishing a connection for their current behavior through one simple word 'coward' just gripped me. Even if they were thinking of the entire situation in a different way, they both in the end consider themselves cowards. I never knew that one word can say so much about someones feelings, but you obviously showed me that it's possible. I think that it's a wonderful way of explaining their situation.
I also loved the fact that Sasuke's reason for staying home is to protect Sakura. You really managed to surprise me with the 'at least I owe her that much' line, but in a very pleasant way. Reading that just melted my heart! :) Oh, and his reaction to the pink blur and all those feelings that flew through him at the moment... I have to praise you for that wonderful description! I think that these small little things make you a wonderful author.
I love that you are making the interactions of the members of Team Seven progress with a steady pace. It makes everything even more realistic. I also love Naruto's role in this chapter! I mean, the way he is the one that stands in the middle of things and is the one that struggles most to make things work is definitely something he would do. I feel like I can see an image of him holding Sakura and Sasuke's hands tightly and tries desperately to bring them closer, exactly as if he is the medium that doesn't let them drift even more apart. I don't know if this makes any sense to you, but I wanted to share my thoughts with you. :)
Now, I will quote you (I just can't help it)...
'Why was his life becoming nothing more than a blur?
As he slid into bed, pulling the covers high over his head like a cocoon, Sasuke wondered numbly if this was how he'd die—just fading away little by little.'
I can't even find the right words to say about this. I just know that it speaks so much about everything that has happened in Sasuke's life. I see so much feeling in this little paragraph and that is exactly what made me quote you. I had to tell you that I love it!
The flow of the story is just perfect. I love the development of the happenings and how there are so many promising scenes that make me anxious about the following chapters. I already have a feeling that you will feed my insatiable brain with so much loveliness as the story progresses. The anticipation is already killing me! I hope you'll be updating soon, 'cause I really really love this story and I think that it's growing on me so much that I feel like it's already high in my list of Top 5. :) You did an awesome job writing this! Now, you are definitely not sweating alone. ;)
| aliaschantra chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Nice first chap. Keep it coming please.