|Reviews for Grand Theft Auto: Episodes From San Andreas|
| blondebabe800 chapter 23 . 2/24/2012
Well, I'm glad to see BJ survived after that scare! I think your chapters with Toni are my favourites-I really like him.
| blondebabe800 chapter 22 . 2/22/2012
Oh wow, what a cliffhanger! Please tell me Brian is okay?
| blondebabe800 chapter 5 . 11/18/2011
I think this was my favourite chapter so far. Miko's all guts and no brains. :P A bulletproof vest probably wouldn't work so well from such a short range, but I'm guessing you're not trying to be realistic here.
Can't wait for more! :)
| blondebabe800 chapter 3 . 11/14/2011
Nice, taking out OG Loc! I really like the way you leave off with a cliffhanger-makes me wonder what's happening next!
You've still got a lot of weirdness going on with your punctuation during dialogue, though. Check out an actual novel to see how it's done.
Great job, can't wait for the next chapter. :)
| blondebabe800 chapter 2 . 11/12/2011
Well, the action just keeps coming! Well done. Did BJ ever meet Woozie?
Just a couple of grammar/stylistic points: swear words don't need to be capitalized, and you do need to use punctuation in your dialogue. A few examples:
"It should," she said, "look like this."
"I agree," the man replied.
The girl said, "So let's do it that way."
A beta would be massively helpful for catching some of these errors.
The content is excellent; looking forward to more.
| blondebabe800 chapter 1 . 11/11/2011
Not a bad story. You start it out with a bang, which is nice, and I totally didn't see Aaron teaming up with the Ballas. I do have one suggestion for you, though: every time the speaker changes, you need to use a new paragraph. It makes things a lot clearer.