Reviews for My Sorrow
krillian chapter 1 . 8/11/2003
very touching.

prraise the LORD
Chincilla chapter 1 . 11/10/2002
Very good! This is really cool and really captures the essence of what a lot of Christians feel when they're bummed out. At least, that's what I think. I have a tendancy to be wrong...a lot! but anyway, good job! keep writing, and God Bless!
Zarius chapter 1 . 5/17/2002
Keep knocking that door..

great job.
suckerplucker chapter 1 . 5/2/2002
ummmm

im an atheist so sorry to rain on your parade but the jesus vibe isnt my favorite part. I think that using hath etc. can be used successfully but you use it only some of the time, this comes off as only confusing. One more negative before i get to the pluses, your rhyming seems force and i think your poetry would be much more affective as free verse.

Positives:

You did a very good job of expressing your emotions and i would love it if you revisited/expanded this poem because its a really great start

zac
Tallulah chapter 1 . 5/2/2002
Quite sad. I hope you feel better now! Some of the language a little cliched, but nice willingness to turn to God.
Suzieque chapter 1 . 5/2/2002
You're knocking on the right door. Romans remember Romans 8:28!

-Tamie