|Reviews for Off the Shoulder of Orion|
| Raiining chapter 11 . 1/13/2012
Oooooh, well done. Great chapter, love things coming together, still have odds on the First Officer being in the Syndicate. Love the Admiral, always. Very awesome! As always, cant wait for more :)
| TheNaggingCube chapter 11 . 1/13/2012
Wow this is fantastic. I love it. All of Tom's experiences honed by the Kirk Center are being utilized to ferret out the bad guys.
Who will it be?
Hurry with more soon please it is killing me to not know what is next!
| Runawaymetaphor chapter 11 . 1/13/2012
I've never liked to define my life in terms of lists or finite things. Too much existential angst I guess (me? angst? never). But it's funny, now that I think about it, that the 'defining lists' that stay with me are the short ones. Not the longish list of grievances about this or that aspect of the past, but, you know, the more interior things. Like the principles I'd stake my livelihood on, that one thing I wouldn't change no matter the subsequent pain. And more to the core than anything else, those few people who mean everything, for whom I'd give my life, move mountains and stars, fly to Delta quadrant even just to make smile. And knowing all the while they would, for some misguides reason, do the same for me.
All of this to say, I am somehow certain the power and energy Tom has in his trusted ''short list" far outweighs that of the list of the Syndicate's operatives, however extensive it may be.
| angelscatie chapter 11 . 1/13/2012
Great chapter. I am really enjoying this universe that you have created. Please update soon!
| Jump Highly chapter 10 . 1/11/2012
It's all so deliciously intriguing! You've done a great job of setting up a list of suspects that is thoroughly unappealing, even in it's non-Voyager additions. I'm also really appreciating how you handle that DQ divide, from how Ayala and Nicoletti slip into calling Tom by his first name to zany stories and black humor and confusion,
The Doctor, of course, remains a source of great merriment, and you write him excellently. So glad he's on board, smelling foul and all. I also greatly appreciate your care with scientific details, fictional and otherwise. There's clearly great thought and consistency in yur science fiction, but you manage that without the explanations becoming ponderous.
Sorry for the delays in review; I'm overseas on a project right now and just haven't been able to keep up, so I just read several chapters. But what a wonderful treat they were. Keep up the good work!
| Raiining chapter 10 . 1/7/2012
Oh, good chapter. Miral is so cute. And wanted to say, love that we're getting more B in this story. Cant wait for the next chapter!
| Runawaymetaphor chapter 10 . 1/6/2012
""That still doesn't explain why a woman would want to participate in the … abuse of other women," Nicoletti frowned.
"And just what makes you think men have cornered the market on ruthlessness?" The Doctor's voice, although it was starting to slow down perceptibly now under the weight of the unexpurgated data from Kalpak Station, still managed to hold a measure of acerbity." "
One of the Doctor's sharper observations. Though admittedly, I envy Nicoletti's apparent lack of intimacy with the relevant... sociological phenomena.
| CrlkSeasons chapter 10 . 1/4/2012
I can identify with Tom in the recycling compartment, filtering incoming comm traffic while trying to process the information available to him - a discussion about gender and wrong doing, the image of the Doctor as a dill pickle, crewman Cor Zelis, the demonstration of profound sensitivity and respect when Asil asks Lamarr for her permission before passing her information along to the Captain, Miral's naive revelation that the Captain's wife is free to tell him that he's an idiot if he ends up getting hurt on one of his missions, and the fact that the Orion Syndicate's reach is extending farther into Federation space which sets an ominous tone for this and any other stories that may follow. This is such a densely layered chapter that it's going to take several readings to process it fully.
| Nana Evans chapter 10 . 1/4/2012
You're early! That's why I love holydays...
Back to the story... Things are not looking good for our favorite Captain: the only doubts about the traitor would be between his XO, who's also a friend, or a crewman he probabily don't know nothing about besides the name. And things are pointing to the Commander, after all he did volunterred for this mission...
Oh, "...He's a brave warrior and likes to help people. Sometimes he gets hurt doing it and then Mommy says he's an idiot, and Uncle Doc has to fix him up..." - that was by far my favorite line. Have I told you that I love the way you write about Miral? It's brilliant.
waiting for the next one!
ps: What has that poor jacket ever done to you? But it sure is funny to keep track of the trials that piece of clothing has endured...
| tayababy chapter 10 . 1/4/2012
Hmmm, I'm loving Asil. She's so much like her father, yet so different from him at the same time. ad tht scene down in the nursery with miral and lemarr was amazing; deferring to her for her permission was just genius :)
And I love how sincere and passionate little miral is about her family, and how well she took lemarr as a friend. It's actually kinda funny and kinda sweet at the same time.
As for the traitor, I'm as confused as Tom, and can't or te life of me think who did it and why...
Oh well, happy new year. I look forward to the next installment :)
| beautyofsorrow chapter 10 . 1/4/2012
"Sightseeing," Tom responded, sufficiently annoyed at the interruption to snap back. "Lovely place you got here. Thinking of buying shares."
Paris sarcasm at its peak. I think I just died from bliss.
"Nausicaans. The equivalent to Earth's pachyderms, when it came to the energy output required to knock one out."
And again, that biting humor I so love.
"What would Janeway do? Picard? Tom Paris …?"
Love the "Thirty Days" echo.
"Sometimes he gets hurt doing it and then Mommy says he's an idiot, and Uncle Doc has to fix him up."
Ahh, the innocence of children. This was my favorite scene. Perfect in its simplicity.
| Kurbits chapter 10 . 1/4/2012
Great chapter! There are so many great things about this story; how you portray the characters, the way the story is progressing and how you keep us hooked with the clues and revelations. Good job!
| angelscatie chapter 10 . 1/4/2012
Great chapter like always. I wonder how Tervellyan met Darmoth Krall and if he is part of the Syndicate? Oh well, looking forward to seeing the next chapter.
| TheNaggingCube chapter 10 . 1/4/2012
Wow! What a chapter, the ending bit so very very powerful.
Love love Schmidt's presence.
Miral I just wanna squeeze her to pieces.
| beautyofsorrow chapter 9 . 1/2/2012
"Bring them back, Tom. And don't be too much of a hero. Torres out."
I love how this one line says so very VERY much about their relationship. And that you know these two well enough to recognize that.